11-07-2017, 09:31 AM
Why retaining kyushu as secondary zoi when no agreement with kusari went in that sense, and why neglecting Rishiri for zoi when it's considered as a border system and a Gallic base is actually there, not to mention it's supposed to be a vital route for gallia?
A few trivial things also trigger me in the faction status post, which is pretty awesome, save for those few things :
- L'histoire de la marine royale Gauloise : It's a title, the article is not needed here (L').
- La Diplomacie de la Couronne Gauloise : Same as above; The locution makes little sense however; Diplomatie du Royaume?
- Les objectifs : Same as above. You could even add a "prioritaires" there for good measure.
- Chaîne de commande : Command hierarchy = Chaîne de commandement. Chaîne de commande is what you could say in a technical context.
- Navires utilisés par la marine royale Gauloise : Navires sail the seas, they don't go into spess. Try "Vaisseaux" or "Bâtiments". Note the repetition of "La marine royale Gauloise". Probably not needed.
- "La Valor is the pride of the Roi himself..." : Nghhh. Meme tier. Valor is the ship class. If you really want to throw some french words in that, say something like "Les bâtiments de class Valor/Valeur are the pride of..."
Sorry for bothering you with petty details, but it's especially cringy in a pretty nice faction status post like yours.
I'm afraid I can't say much about how nice you may or may not be in game since I had very little contact with you folks. We planned to do something in New Tokyo a while ago, but it never happened in the end.
I hope you will make it nevertheless.
A few trivial things also trigger me in the faction status post, which is pretty awesome, save for those few things :
- L'histoire de la marine royale Gauloise : It's a title, the article is not needed here (L').
- La Diplomacie de la Couronne Gauloise : Same as above; The locution makes little sense however; Diplomatie du Royaume?
- Les objectifs : Same as above. You could even add a "prioritaires" there for good measure.
- Chaîne de commande : Command hierarchy = Chaîne de commandement. Chaîne de commande is what you could say in a technical context.
- Navires utilisés par la marine royale Gauloise : Navires sail the seas, they don't go into spess. Try "Vaisseaux" or "Bâtiments". Note the repetition of "La marine royale Gauloise". Probably not needed.
- "La Valor is the pride of the Roi himself..." : Nghhh. Meme tier. Valor is the ship class. If you really want to throw some french words in that, say something like "Les bâtiments de class Valor/Valeur are the pride of..."
Sorry for bothering you with petty details, but it's especially cringy in a pretty nice faction status post like yours.
I'm afraid I can't say much about how nice you may or may not be in game since I had very little contact with you folks. We planned to do something in New Tokyo a while ago, but it never happened in the end.
I hope you will make it nevertheless.