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The Retribution Chronicles - Leo - 02-09-2008
Just nice to know the communities opinion to see if the story is making sense to others, that's all.
The Retribution Chronicles - SimonBlack - 02-09-2008
I read it all. Quite good, so far. There is a 'but' though.
You get rescued. You meet a girl. You land on one of major planets. You kill someone. You get attacked. You get rescued. You meet another girl.
It keeps repeating itself.
The Retribution Chronicles - Leo - 02-10-2008
It all ties in together my friend, glad to see you're noticing the pattern;)
The Retribution Chronicles - SimonBlack - 02-10-2008
Is it some kind of mystical drama movie, where a guy wokes up everyday on the same day? I think I saw it somewhere...:P
The Retribution Chronicles - Leo - 02-10-2008
You'll see soon enough...
You'll see...
The Retribution Chronicles - SimonBlack - 02-10-2008
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SpoilerThe Retribution Chronicles - marauder - 02-10-2008
Also, Leo seems to be losing an awfully large amount of blood recently.
You trying to push us into donating? (j/king:) )
The Retribution Chronicles - Leo - 02-11-2008
Sure!
A positive is his blood type.
...smart elic:P
The Retribution Chronicles - Leo - 02-21-2008
New RP post coming in a few days! I'll keep you all updated!!
~Leo
The Retribution Chronicles - Angelfire - 02-21-2008
All i can say is that this community is insanely talented.
Have you submitted your stuff to any publishers yet?
To assume the market is flooded is to fail before you begin.
Send your stuff to anyone and everyone you can... Your storytelling is unbelievably good!
I agree with the comments about repeating theme though, no matter how much we need it, ciriticism always means more work.
don't be afraid to go back and change stuff, the idea is that by the time all is revealed, your reader is still reading...
besides that..dammit but you're good..heh heh.