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Crystal Wind: Comments - Saigo.Watanabe - 09-27-2008
Story
Constructive Criticism and praise only.
Crystal Wind: Comments - Orin - 09-27-2008
Not bad. Some minor grammar issues, but nothing that bad.
Not sure what you meant by GMG and BHG conflicts, though. Last time I checked they weren't enemies.:unsure:
Crystal Wind: Comments - Saigo.Watanabe - 09-27-2008
yeh, i kindda ment the conflicts with the outcasts, but pm me with the grammar issues and ill fix them:)
Crystal Wind: Comments - Ash - 09-27-2008
Its really good, an aspect never really covered before.
This is a good way of publicising stories really, i need someone to evaluate my KNF story anyway. Anyone up to the task?
Crystal Wind: Comments - Orin - 09-27-2008
' Wrote:...an aspect never really covered before...Well, I wouldn't say that. We've got quite a few jelly people, but everything has been done, really.
I'm looking foward to seeing more of her, something that sets her apart from other infests.
Crystal Wind: Comments - Ash - 09-27-2008
Nah i meant as in a good side of the Nomads.
Or is that what you mean anyway?
Crystal Wind: Comments - Orin - 09-27-2008
Heh... <pokes La Viuda Roja prologue> Good side of Nomads...
No, I meant I have seen a lot of infested stories. But no, there haven't been a whole lot of good portrayed in the Nomads.
Crystal Wind: Comments - Ash - 09-27-2008
I read it, its alright, based on quotes.
I dont suppose your planning a sequal?
Crystal Wind: Comments - Saigo.Watanabe - 09-27-2008
This is mearly the start... expect more to come
Crystal Wind: Comments - Orin - 09-27-2008
Aye, the prologue is just talking. An interesting writing form I never tried before. There are two chapters afterwards...
If you want to comment on that though, there's a feedback topic for it. Keep to Saigo's story here, don't want any hijacking.
I'm looking foward to it, Saigo.