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Shelly Zachary - Feedback thread - ~Chio - 10-15-2018 ⧫ Shelly Zachary - Feedback thread I am opening up this feedback thread to get feedback on my character story, that I am enjoying so far. This is the "Introduction" I have written up for her. ⧫ Introduction: Hello, my name is Shelly, known as Lieutenant Commander Shelly. This is my first real biography after many years of writting. That's the reason why I would like to apologise. So now we could start with information sharing, no? As I said, you can call me Shelly, the short version of Lieutenant Commander Shelly. I was born on the most beautiful planet in the whole universe, known as Toledo. As you probably know, there was a fight for Toledo, which we've "lost" because we were getting attacked by multiple faction as: Core, Outcasts and Nomads. After that event, which was very sad, we've moved to the Omicron Mu where I found my new love, Akabat. From there things get a bit more interesting... I'll probably going to add a diary, to improve the story and all of that, it will take me some time but I would like to give it a try. If you have anything to commentate about the thread, please make it helpful if it's negative. I'm looking forward to improve all of this. Thank you. Attachments ⧫ Biography: x |