+- Discovery Gaming Community (https://discoverygc.com/forums)
+-- Forum: Role-Playing (https://discoverygc.com/forums/forumdisplay.php?fid=9)
+--- Forum: Stories and Biographies (https://discoverygc.com/forums/forumdisplay.php?fid=56)
+---- Forum: RP Stories Feedback Forum (https://discoverygc.com/forums/forumdisplay.php?fid=29)
+---- Thread: When Men Were Gods Feedback Thread (/showthread.php?tid=40999)
When Men Were Gods Feedback Thread - Sprolf - 06-01-2010
The story.
Firstly,
Yes, I realise this story is nuts. Yes, it is the actual story.
Yes, it is supported by Freelancer canon. Yes, Tales and I had this planned as our character origins. I'm not powergaming his character (Alexander Brown) by including him in this story. This was our plan, all along.
It needs to be written.
This is in no way public knowledge at all, please don't start metagaming it, heh.
Feedback can go below.
When Men Were Gods Feedback Thread - Marcus Lindberg - 06-01-2010
I absolutely -love- your intro, we need more stories with attention grabbing intros like that. I don't think I've ever been hooked to a book/story like this since Red Storm Rising or House To House.
I'm just convinced about one thing though, I asked on Skype but your not on and I absolutely need to know so..
In the fourth post, something went wrong and Alaister and Alexander were a part of it, did they end up 5 centuries in the past or is it something else, you weren't quite clear there.
But yeah, the rest of the story is pretty decent so far.
When Men Were Gods Feedback Thread - Sprolf - 06-01-2010
I made some revisions, read through those parts again.
Also, re-add me to your contacts on Skype.
Also, thanks a ton for the praise.
It means a lot, especially the fact that you were caught by the intro.
When Men Were Gods Feedback Thread - Politus - 06-01-2010
I can't express how much I'm enjoying this story. It's short so far, but genius in concept. I keep wondering about the plan Mister Brown has. '_'
When Men Were Gods Feedback Thread - Zeltak - 06-01-2010
The introduction somehow reminded me of the American Psycho novel.
So naturally I wanted to read the whole thing, great so far.
When Men Were Gods Feedback Thread - Sprolf - 06-01-2010
I'll hopefully be adding several posts each night... I've got my writing mojo back after forever and ever. Thanks for the comments, lads, I hope not to disappoint you all.
When Men Were Gods Feedback Thread - Rodent - 06-02-2010
Seems rather like a book I once read....Awesome story. I'll be following it.
When Men Were Gods Feedback Thread - Sprolf - 06-24-2010
Good heavens, it's been two weeks since my last post?
Time flies when you get a job. Ugh.
More posts forthcoming, lads, despite DSE's dissolving.
That factors nicely into this story, as a matter of fact.
When Men Were Gods Feedback Thread - Laowai - 06-24-2010
This format for approval is simple, i like it:
I am Laowai - and i approve of this.
Its a good story so far - definitely readable and interesting, i shall be reading more to see in which direction you take this.:)
When Men Were Gods Feedback Thread - Sprolf - 06-24-2010
Thanks a lot, evidently I'm hitting right where I'm aiming for.
I have a tendency to get bogged down with stories, so if it's readable and interesting, that's my two objectives accomplished.
I should be posting more very soon. Hopefully I shall finish this story within a two months if I get back to posting. (I'm currently working on a non-Discovery story, somewhat large, so that bogs my writing time down.)
Thanks for the feedback, and I hope my future posts won't disappoint.