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Need a little help RP - trekky - 02-28-2011
ok i Applied for Ageira Technologies Recruitment
this is what i put down
In Character Part:'¢Name: Noonien Soong
'¢Date Of Birth: 788 A.S.
'¢Sex: male
'¢Previous Jobs: I worked as an independent trader
'¢Skills: trading/working large ship
'¢Place of Birth: USS _Enterprise (A).
'¢Department Interested in Joining: Transportation Division
Please answer all the following Questions:
Why do you want to join Ageira Technologies?
dad work as a independant trader for a long time when i got old enough he gave me the ship and after 1 year working for myself i would like a corp flag under my name
Have you ever been charged with crime or have a criminal Record? If so what for?
nope.
Do you have any skills that you think will benefit you in the field you requested?
I always fly as fast as I can so I am able to get the best relation between profit and the time being used to make it. i try to talk myself out of fights.
Tell us about yourself.
born on USS_Enterprise (A) my was pretty normal for a life for a captains son
Lol I remember one time on the USS_Enterprise (A) he told a pirate to go to ****
Well the pirate destroyed the ship we were in escape pods for 3 days
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OOC Information:'¢Character Names: USS _Enterprise
'¢Timezone: GMT-5
Do you have your own vessel you will be using?
yes i own a Barge
Have you been sanctioned within the last six months?
yes
Internet disconnected and was killed when I was offline so i forgot to report it
and i got this
Mr Soong, your application has been denied.
pls tell me what i did wrong and anything i can do to impove my application
any opinion on what i can do to do better?
Need a little help RP - Alex. - 02-28-2011
Well, I guess the "Lol I remember one time on the USS_Enterprise (A) he told a pirate to go to ****" didn't help much.
Need a little help RP - Markus_Janus - 02-28-2011
I think it is important for Ageira to see where you are, RP speaking.
So just type up something that you are happy with and send it in.
I am sure you will find they won't just disgard you and if they do happen to find something wrong with your application, will talk to you about it.
Need a little help RP - Contaan - 02-28-2011
My advice is to use a spell checker as well. It makes any application easier to read and understand. Also, look at other applications to see what worked, and what didn't work for them.
Edit: Try to flesh out your story a little more as well. Talk about where your character has been, and what he has done in the past.
Quote:"Do you have any skills that you think will benefit you in the field you requested?
I always fly as fast as I can so I am able to get the best relation between profit and the time being used to make it. i try to talk myself out of fights.
Tell us about yourself.
born on USS_Enterprise (A) my was pretty normal for a life for a captains son
Lol I remember one time on the USS_Enterprise (A) he told a pirate to go to ****
Well the pirate destroyed the ship we were in escape pods for 3 days
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This would concern me as well... as you say you "talk your way out of fights", but have been in a situation before that your character's father (I'm guessing) "told a pirate to go to ****". I am not certain of Ageira's policy but I also doubt they will allow you to fly a barge as a newcommer into their faction unless you have permission. Finally, if you see any Ageira, or any faction you want to join in-game, try flying with them sometime. Once they get an idea for your RP, and how you act, it will give them a better picture of who you are, instead of just text.
Need a little help RP - alphadog - 02-28-2011
And, even if your name is trekky, I suggest you remove all your Star Trek references. This isn't a Star Trek game, and ships aren't called USS-Something.
Need a little help RP - 'Ends' - 02-28-2011
I don't think Ageira likes their employees to say 'Lol' and tell pirates to go to <blocked>.And I think they want members who remember to post on the forum when they dc...
Need a little help RP - Jack_Henderson - 02-28-2011
I would not accept it because USS Enterprise creates a picture in my head that is not compatible with Discovery. If I see the USS-Enterprise, Captain Picard buying gold ore in Dublin, I shake my head every time.
The Disco universe is one of great possibilities. Why play a character that doesn't belong there?
Need a little help RP - dodike - 02-28-2011
I suggest flying with other Ageira members for the time being and prove yourself.
Need a little help RP - Echo 7-7 - 02-28-2011
All of the replies to your post here are relevant and essentially correct. Please think about them in conjunction with the PM I sent you.