Feedback on Tales of The Queen Anne's Revenge

[Crysis]

I am not the best of writers and posted my first piece today, didnt want to make it a; Here you go, hes got a gunboat, becoming rich and kicking ass story, wanted to make the foundations and build it up. It is based on a RP im going to start ingame soon and need some feedback. Based on a Mobster/Fearsome Pirate built up from poverty into illegal trading/traficking, bribing and pirating. It will develop into something good hopefully.

I need ways to improve etc. not that you can get much atm, don't need the 'This sucks' or 'Flamming' comments.

Story Link; The Tales of The Queen Anne's Revenge

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