I had an encounter with one of your gents in Cortez today. Usually Rogues in Cortez is just part of a day's work, so np, np. However, said Rogue was camping at the Planet Curacao Docking Ring. From my previous experience, I didn't think this was LR-'s style. What concerned me more was that his ship was not rephacked hostile OSC, evident by the fact the docking ring guns were not shooting at him, and that he accidentally managed to dock with the planet.
I think that's all I really have to say. My only other suggestion for that pilot is to flesh out your demands a little bit, so that it's more than just "1 million". (In fact, that's not even a demand, just a statement.)