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Bolshack's incredible influence is what belongs to the Mary Sue category. Omg, so much connections he can do anything for anyone.

This wasn't said anywhere in the story. He proposed a deal that would be very helpful to the Navy and risky to himself. Navy didn't have to spend taxpayers' money for building a cruiser and training. Bolshack would take responsibility for everything that would go wrong during Lionel's training process and had still to be available for assignments. Due to the fact, that tensions with Rheinland at that time weren't too high, his training could be finished in a year.

Proven yourself in a snub already so Navy agrees to give you a cap prior to any training?

This, again, was not said anywhere in the story. Lionel could not be in active service during his training or use the cruiser for any other purpose than training because this is not how it works.

Random nameless admiral in a snub (lol) appears, watches over one mission you apparently succeed at, and promotes you based on that only one mission he inspected?

Have you ever taken an exam? Once you go to any kind of school or course, you are being taught something for a set period of time and then you have to pass an exam to get a certificate, admission or whatever. This was exactly a similar situation. Also note that Bolshack still was a naval commander that oversaw the whole training.

You resign from duty and the Navy just let you go with a massive piece of military technology which a) could be further used against Rheinland, b) nobody knows or have control over what you do, since you are a civilian now, not bound by Navy code and laws and c) nobody could stop you should you want to sell this technology?

a) No, because this was a privately owned ship and therefore they couldn't just 'steal' it from him. If Lionel ever said that he leaves the Navy for good, it's the only moment they could take up the cruiser, but he never did.
b) He's not a civilian. He is still in the Navy, but not in active service. This cruiser is also facilely tracked by the Navy, so they still can access the information about its whereabouts at any point in time and communicate with it when it's not docked.
c) Yeah, nobody, but the crew and pretty much anyone on the Norfolk shipyard where the cruiser is docked (this is a roleplay limitation, that Kosciusko can not be logged out anywhere except Norfolk).

logical and more and more Mary Sue I-want-all-goods-no-bads to me.

Both of the Vigilante caps have specific roleplay limitations, so this is invalid. Kosciusko cannot dock anywhere but Norfolk except for resupply, while Victory Rush cannot dock anywhere, period.

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