Sorry about the delay. I do like the read and cant wait to see where it goes from there. I mean it seems as though you said everything about her life but I'm going to guess I'm wrong.
I am not really good at RP stories but I like your story and want to help, so...
How about giving some life to the cyborg girl... Make her more personal?
Give the story some psycological side and she will become the heroine we will love. Either make her a cyborg that has feelings or give her a sidekick who is affected deeply by her.
If I am right by assuming that the main theme is "Hope and Despair", we have to feel those. Create a scene for us made of "Hope and Despair". It will feel empty with a "goes there, does that" story.
The girl is an entity with no knowledge of her origin, capable of human feelings yet not human, despairs with a destiny of a lonely life but still hopes that one day she can form her a life she can be happy. That's at least one thing she can be.
After all, even though she is a machine, she still is in the pursuit of happiness, ultimately.