Overall good story so far... Maybe could have added a bit more to the fight or at least a bit more insight on the pilot itself... But def. keep it up looking forward to chap. 2
Thanks
Yeah I'm just getting the bare bones written down at the moment, this is all stuff i have RP'd in game. I will 'flesh it out' a bit more soon. It is supposed to be more of a biography than a story, but i'll try to keep it interesting
Chapter 2 is up now