In intrigued. I'll keep reading when I get the chance, I only read the first post...however, I'll make one critique for you...don't make all your posts on the same day. Make one post maybe every week or two. This'll ensure that people read each of your posts when you make a new one. Also, it'll allow you to re-read your posts every so often so that you can brainstorm more on how you want the story to flow.
Other than that the story is great, I'll keep reading a bit later tonight at work.
And I normally would have not posted it all at once, but this was an old thing from over a year ago, not sure if I would do any more work on it or not... so I decided to just post everything I had in case I never got any farther, it did lay dormant for a while.