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Hey guys, this is my new Geb commander. i want to focus something else other then my Osiris and possibly work towards another SRP ship.

Sonya's Dossier can be found here

Well, same thingie again. Did you need the name to be a reference?

im sorry what?

Sonya Blade is a character from Mortal Kombat. I thought the rules kind of apply. No?

My character is not a representative of that game, hence no rule violation.

Too hot to be a captain. If I was among her crew, I'd slander her arse with my mates every time she passes by (and gets far enough not to whip me for it. Or maybe I wouldn't mind to get whipped by her...)

At least she uses it to her advantage. Explains how a young woman got to command a Geb (and reminds me of someone *giggles*). I like how her brother got employed right after graduating, by the way, due to his family connection, and now the bugger gets to advise a captain out of turn too. Her story seems unfinished, though. "Something snapped" is a very vague justification for changing one's mind. What snapped and why exactly?

Her parents' deaths as the reason to start using her beauty to her advantage is very vague as well. Something must have happened in between. What has?

you are correct its not finished and as time goes on i will add more, when i say something snapped i was trying to reference the fall of toledo and for Sonya hearing Liberty was under attack made her feel like she had to do something to try and make a difference.

Besides Thunderer's suggestions, the write up could use more care generally.

The first sentence is wrong. 'She was is known to be kind'. Also, 'tho'? 'All tho'? Should be, though and although.

Best get a friend to read it and point out the problems.

More content added to her biography and very brief ship specs added