Discovery Gaming Community

Well the name pretty sums is up...
I wrote a story yet i dont know what you folks think... Here is the place to say what i did wrong...
Here is link to the story> http://discoverygc.com/forums/index.php?showtopic=81952

Added some... edited some... Throw in your opinion. It would really help me...

Added two sub-episodes and fixed some errors...

I wonder if somebody ever reply to this...