05-12-2013, 10:02 PM
''Miles enters his room on Barrier Gate Station with an exhausted look on his face''
The room is bleak and looks like it hasn't been cleaned for several years. In the room are only a few things. A bunk bolted to the wall, a chair and a small round table in the center.
Man, these last few days have been... Well... Interesting... Fighting... Well fighting might not be the right word. More like annoying the navy with a Gaull Junker, never thought that would happen... Guess not all of them are bad eggs. What was his name... Apple... Something, eh it dosen't matter.
''He sits down on the chair and closes his eyes''
Man i miss my old room on the Metro... Wonder what ever happened to her...
''His eyes open and a look appears in them''
Maybe the Junkers... They got all sorts of connections and... Ship building expertise.
I bet they could come up with a ship us Raiders could call home. Might even be as nice as back on the Metropolis. Plus we picked up a good bunch of possible slaves that could keep the ship in good condition.
''Miles pauses for a moment, then grabs a notepad''
Better write this down. Bound to forget it otherwise ''He chuckles''
Maybe i should ... ''A knock on the door is heard throughout the room''
''Miles pulls out his sidearm, a gun so old it'd be a miracle if it were to get a shot off''
''He opens the door slowly and finds a fellow raider at the door''
Oh, it's you. Got my stuff?
''The other Raider nods and hands Miles a small cardamine canister''
Great! Just what i needed, head on down to the bar and have a drink on my tab. I'll be down shortly.
''Miles closes the door and replaces his cardamine inhaler''
''He takes a deep breath, a quick look around the miserable conditions of what he currently calls home''
Well... Hopefully this will change
''He says with a sigh of relief and walks out the door and heads towards the bar''
// I'd like some feedback if your guys have time. Tell me in PM what i can do better or different.
The room is bleak and looks like it hasn't been cleaned for several years. In the room are only a few things. A bunk bolted to the wall, a chair and a small round table in the center.
Man, these last few days have been... Well... Interesting... Fighting... Well fighting might not be the right word. More like annoying the navy with a Gaull Junker, never thought that would happen... Guess not all of them are bad eggs. What was his name... Apple... Something, eh it dosen't matter.
''He sits down on the chair and closes his eyes''
Man i miss my old room on the Metro... Wonder what ever happened to her...
''His eyes open and a look appears in them''
Maybe the Junkers... They got all sorts of connections and... Ship building expertise.
I bet they could come up with a ship us Raiders could call home. Might even be as nice as back on the Metropolis. Plus we picked up a good bunch of possible slaves that could keep the ship in good condition.
''Miles pauses for a moment, then grabs a notepad''
Better write this down. Bound to forget it otherwise ''He chuckles''
Maybe i should ... ''A knock on the door is heard throughout the room''
''Miles pulls out his sidearm, a gun so old it'd be a miracle if it were to get a shot off''
''He opens the door slowly and finds a fellow raider at the door''
Oh, it's you. Got my stuff?
''The other Raider nods and hands Miles a small cardamine canister''
Great! Just what i needed, head on down to the bar and have a drink on my tab. I'll be down shortly.
''Miles closes the door and replaces his cardamine inhaler''
''He takes a deep breath, a quick look around the miserable conditions of what he currently calls home''
Well... Hopefully this will change
''He says with a sigh of relief and walks out the door and heads towards the bar''
// I'd like some feedback if your guys have time. Tell me in PM what i can do better or different.