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Smeagle Feedback - Death.RunningVerminator - 07-03-2011
When i first made Smeagle i decided i would post a "Feedback here" thread AFTER he was dead.
Welp.
This is it. So if anyone has any feedback they would like to give regarding Smeagle's stories, in-game interactions, background, etc., please feel free to do so. Questions, comments, and feedback please.
Here are some but not all links regarding Smeagle:
Quote:Smeagle RP
Smeagle RP
Smeagle RP
Smeagle RP
Smeagle RP
Abandoned Smeagle RP
That's from the link in my sig. There's lots'o more than that, but meh i can't be arsed to search through the past like 2 years worth of threads and such.
EDIT: Here's more. Order for earliest to latest.
http://discoverygc.com/forums/index.php?sh...c=99459&hl=
http://discoverygc.com/forums/index.php?sh...c=99603&hl= (not so much involving smeagle, but relevant to his RP)
http://discoverygc.com/forums/index.php?sh...c=99962&hl=
http://discoverygc.com/forums/index.php?sh...c=99641&hl=
Ya know what i think is funny though? Lots of people think Smeagle's my oldest char, but, truth be told i still have my first char i ever made.. That Death Runner guy nobody gives a rat's ass about. xD Hehehe
Well anyways, please please please gimme feedback so my other chars will improve and so will my writing.
Thanks!
-DRV
Smeagle Feedback - Death.RunningVerminator - 07-03-2011
Bump..
Aw come on anyone?
:3
Smeagle Feedback - Korny - 07-03-2011
I'm sure there's lotsa' work in it, but the character itself doesn't interest me.
Smeagle Feedback - Death.RunningVerminator - 07-04-2011
' Wrote:I'm sure there's lotsa' work in it, but the character itself doesn't interest me.Heh. Alrighty, thanks for the comment Kornykins :)
Smeagle Feedback - SaraOConnel - 07-04-2011
Well, after reading the forum RP, it sort of comes across as a bad, over dramatic, slapstick-esque television show that somehow got cleared for a first season, then got cut afterwards.
But, I've never met Smeagle in space, so I'm not sure how you RP in a dynamic setting.
Lots of it seems disjointed and terribly cliché. Almost forced at times. But I must say, there was a lot of time put into it, and just be reading, I must admit I did begin to ... Sort of empathise with Smeagle to an extent. The ending, I found, was something just thrown in to get rid of the character- and was overtly harsh.
I can't say I shed any tears for Smeagle, but I do think that he deserved more story, and more growth as a character than simply death, and eternal torture. Personally, I don't think he deserved that, despite his atrocities.
I had a lot of trouble understanding the plot, if there was one, and the motivations behind your characters. It felt not so much that Smeagle really interacted with people, but a bunch of overtly stereotypical and ... Rather 'animated' two-dimensional characters.
If anything, I think Smeagle was a 2.5 dimensional character, because I found him to have some depth, but not quite enough.
Do you have any specific questions for me regarding any particular point in your RP? I'd be happy to answer.
Smeagle Feedback - Death.RunningVerminator - 07-04-2011
' Wrote:But, I've never met Smeagle in space, so I'm not sure how you RP in a dynamic setting.My responses are in white within your quote.
You'd had to have met Smeagle in space to get the entire thrill. That's where i've always gotten my most compliments from.
Lots of it seems disjointed and terribly cliché. Almost forced at times. But I must say, there was a lot of time put into it, and just be reading, I must admit I did begin to ... Sort of empathise with Smeagle to an extent. The ending, I found, was something just thrown in to get rid of the character- and was overtly harsh.
The ending was in fact to get rid of the character. Overtly harsh? I take that as a compliment, heh.:P
I can't say I shed any tears for Smeagle, but I do think that he deserved more story, and more growth as a character than simply death, and eternal torture. Personally, I don't think he deserved that, despite his atrocities.
I agree with ya. And that's mainly my fault for not giving him more depth simply because of time and my RL stuff. And maybe he didn't deserve it.. maybe he did.. It's still a mysteryyyyyyooooahhh..
I had a lot of trouble understanding the plot, if there was one, and the motivations behind your characters.
I'm horrible with plots, i apologize. Never really liked them much (yes i know you're probably laughing by now). Motivations? Characters? Smeagle's motivation for his evil acts was to survive. What other characters do you mean though?
If anything, I think Smeagle was a 2.5 dimensional character, because I found him to have some depth, but not quite enough.
Next time I'll aim for 3.0 lol :crazy:
Also i just realized that.. i think you missed a whole segment between the time he was evil and the time he turned good/received the cure. I'll fetch the threads in a sec and pop um on the original post.
Thanks for the feedback!
Smeagle Feedback - SaraOConnel - 07-04-2011
You're quite welcome, and it'd definitely be interesting to see a fresh attempt to make a 'deeper' character.
The other characters I refer to would be the early DRV that appears in some of the posts, and the other, miscellaneous characters that appear.
I wouldn't mind seeing some of your own feedback in my thread on my wiki article for one of my spess sheeps. It's up in general discussion if you care to make comments or give any constructive criticism/ideas for improvement.
I look forward to seeing those threads.
Smeagle Feedback - Death.RunningVerminator - 07-04-2011
' Wrote:You're quite welcome, and it'd definitely be interesting to see a fresh attempt to make a 'deeper' character.Ah yes.. My "miscellaneous chars that appear" are not miscellaneous at all, in fact. If you look closely at all my RP storys, other peoples' RP storys, comms threads, watering hole threads.. the chars are all described the same way, acting with the same personality every time.
The other characters I refer to would be the early DRV that appears in some of the posts, and the other, miscellaneous characters that appear.
I wouldn't mind seeing some of your own feedback in my thread on my wiki article for one of my spess sheeps. It's up in general discussion if you care to make comments or give any constructive criticism/ideas for improvement.
I look forward to seeing those threads.
Though.
I realize it's very all-over-the-place so I'm going to try and fix that soon with one thread dedicated to the description of all my chars. Even the miscellaneous ones that are actually just 2 or 3 chars going about doing their chores for Death Runner.
I am intruiged and thankful that you are taking such an interest. You have officially motivated me further and in return i shall give you feedback as well. But uh.. one question.. Link please? Hehe..:P
Btw what did you mean by this?
Quote:The other characters I refer to would be the early DRV that appears in some of the posts
Thanks again! :-D
Smeagle Feedback - SaraOConnel - 07-04-2011
DRV is in the first series of posts, at the bottom of that first page of the thread. DRV seemed to act in a rather generic manner, and his speech and mannerism was a bit cliché. That's what I meant by it.
And you're quite welcome. I really should take a more vested interest in the forums. I like to give and receive opinions, so I may as well do something productive with my input.
Also, link; http://discoverygc.com/forums/index.php?showtopic=103097
EDIT; Also, I might suggest that you make Wiki entries for these characters, as it's a much more organized way to store information compared to a thread. Easier information access and all.
Smeagle Feedback - Death.RunningVerminator - 07-04-2011
' Wrote:DRV is in the first series of posts, at the bottom of that first page of the thread. DRV seemed to act in a rather generic manner, and his speech and mannerism was a bit cliché. That's what I meant by it.DRV is me. Death.RunningVerminator. I think who you mean is "Death Runner." I was in-game before forums, so i named my forum name partly after my char. But i see what you mean.
And you're quite welcome. I really should take a more vested interest in the forums. I like to give and receive opinions, so I may as well do something productive with my input.
Also, link; http://discoverygc.com/forums/index.php?showtopic=103097
EDIT; Also, I might suggest that you make Wiki entries for these characters, as it's a much more organized way to store information compared to a thread. Easier information access and all.
Hm.. Generic.. Cliche.. Ok now you're hurting my feelings. :(
jk jk it's all good. Welp, all i can say about that is i'll work on it.
Oh and ye. Wiki is a good idea..