When i first made Smeagle i decided i would post a "Feedback here" thread AFTER he was dead.
Welp.
This is it. So if anyone has any feedback they would like to give regarding Smeagle's stories, in-game interactions, background, etc., please feel free to do so. Questions, comments, and feedback please.
Here are some but not all links regarding Smeagle:
That's from the link in my sig. There's lots'o more than that, but meh i can't be arsed to search through the past like 2 years worth of threads and such.
Ya know what i think is funny though? Lots of people think Smeagle's my oldest char, but, truth be told i still have my first char i ever made.. That Death Runner guy nobody gives a rat's ass about. xD Hehehe
Well anyways, please please please gimme feedback so my other chars will improve and so will my writing.
Well, after reading the forum RP, it sort of comes across as a bad, over dramatic, slapstick-esque television show that somehow got cleared for a first season, then got cut afterwards.
But, I've never met Smeagle in space, so I'm not sure how you RP in a dynamic setting.
I can't say I shed any tears for Smeagle, but I do think that he deserved more story, and more growth as a character than simply death, and eternal torture. Personally, I don't think he deserved that, despite his atrocities.
I had a lot of trouble understanding the plot, if there was one, and the motivations behind your characters. It felt not so much that Smeagle really interacted with people, but a bunch of overtly stereotypical and ... Rather 'animated' two-dimensional characters.
If anything, I think Smeagle was a 2.5 dimensional character, because I found him to have some depth, but not quite enough.
Do you have any specific questions for me regarding any particular point in your RP? I'd be happy to answer.
The ending was in fact to get rid of the character. Overtly harsh? I take that as a compliment, heh.:P
I can't say I shed any tears for Smeagle, but I do think that he deserved more story, and more growth as a character than simply death, and eternal torture. Personally, I don't think he deserved that, despite his atrocities.
I agree with ya. And that's mainly my fault for not giving him more depth simply because of time and my RL stuff. And maybe he didn't deserve it.. maybe he did.. It's still a mysteryyyyyyooooahhh..
I had a lot of trouble understanding the plot, if there was one, and the motivations behind your characters.
I'm horrible with plots, i apologize. Never really liked them much (yes i know you're probably laughing by now). Motivations? Characters? Smeagle's motivation for his evil acts was to survive. What other characters do you mean though?
If anything, I think Smeagle was a 2.5 dimensional character, because I found him to have some depth, but not quite enough.
Next time I'll aim for 3.0 lol :crazy:
My responses are in white within your quote.
Also i just realized that.. i think you missed a whole segment between the time he was evil and the time he turned good/received the cure. I'll fetch the threads in a sec and pop um on the original post.
You're quite welcome, and it'd definitely be interesting to see a fresh attempt to make a 'deeper' character.
The other characters I refer to would be the early DRV that appears in some of the posts, and the other, miscellaneous characters that appear.
I wouldn't mind seeing some of your own feedback in my thread on my wiki article for one of my spess sheeps. It's up in general discussion if you care to make comments or give any constructive criticism/ideas for improvement.
' Wrote:You're quite welcome, and it'd definitely be interesting to see a fresh attempt to make a 'deeper' character.
The other characters I refer to would be the early DRV that appears in some of the posts, and the other, miscellaneous characters that appear.
I wouldn't mind seeing some of your own feedback in my thread on my wiki article for one of my spess sheeps. It's up in general discussion if you care to make comments or give any constructive criticism/ideas for improvement.
I look forward to seeing those threads.
Ah yes.. My "miscellaneous chars that appear" are not miscellaneous at all, in fact. If you look closely at all my RP storys, other peoples' RP storys, comms threads, watering hole threads.. the chars are all described the same way, acting with the same personality every time.
Though.
I realize it's very all-over-the-place so I'm going to try and fix that soon with one thread dedicated to the description of all my chars. Even the miscellaneous ones that are actually just 2 or 3 chars going about doing their chores for Death Runner.
I am intruiged and thankful that you are taking such an interest. You have officially motivated me further and in return i shall give you feedback as well. But uh.. one question.. Link please? Hehe..:P
Btw what did you mean by this?
Quote:The other characters I refer to would be the early DRV that appears in some of the posts
And you're quite welcome. I really should take a more vested interest in the forums. I like to give and receive opinions, so I may as well do something productive with my input.
EDIT; Also, I might suggest that you make Wiki entries for these characters, as it's a much more organized way to store information compared to a thread. Easier information access and all.
And you're quite welcome. I really should take a more vested interest in the forums. I like to give and receive opinions, so I may as well do something productive with my input.
EDIT; Also, I might suggest that you make Wiki entries for these characters, as it's a much more organized way to store information compared to a thread. Easier information access and all.
DRV is me. Death.RunningVerminator. I think who you mean is "Death Runner." I was in-game before forums, so i named my forum name partly after my char. But i see what you mean.
Hm.. Generic.. Cliche.. Ok now you're hurting my feelings. :(
jk jk it's all good. Welp, all i can say about that is i'll work on it.
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