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Defunct. - Zephyranthes - 02-19-2013
Feedback thread defunct.
RE: Alejandro Garcia's Journal: Feedback Thread - Johnathan Nox Carter - 02-19-2013
Looks fairly interesting so far...
The first person view is very well used as an artistic factor. Everything in general seems good but it could use a bit more on graphic/display. Perhaps some colors or at least a nicer positioning in the page? Anyhow... keep up the good work, and don't worry, you'll get better.
RE: Alejandro Garcia's Journal: Feedback Thread - NebulaCloud - 02-20-2013
I like what you've started. You're not a bad writer at all, as Johnathan said, your use of first person is very good as it gives fairly good insight into the character's mind and exposes a fair amount of his background without going into a long-winded exposition. Keep it up!
RE: Alejandro Garcia's Journal: Feedback Thread - Savas - 03-27-2013
....Not bad Garcia.....not bad...
-Khagan