The first person view is very well used as an artistic factor. Everything in general seems good but it could use a bit more on graphic/display. Perhaps some colors or at least a nicer positioning in the page? Anyhow... keep up the good work, and don't worry, you'll get better.
I like what you've started. You're not a bad writer at all, as Johnathan said, your use of first person is very good as it gives fairly good insight into the character's mind and exposes a fair amount of his background without going into a long-winded exposition. Keep it up!