08-05-2016, 03:52 PM
Feedback Thread
I am opening up this feedback thread to get feedback on my character story, that I am enjoying so far. This is the "Introduction" I have written up for her, but im sure it will change as the roleplay continues.
As time goes on I will keep adding, stories, threads and communication threads for this character here so it is easier to access, people can have a read through.
I am willing to accept both negative, and positive feedback, but mostly I would prefer constructive and helpful feedback. I have never gone to this state before trying to roleplay character. I have done a attempt before which I feel has failed compared to this one.
[Rosalina Romanov and her story] ~ The main roleplay thread which will tell Rosalina's story.
[Profile Database: Rosalina Romanov] ~ Rosalina Romanov Profile Database
[The Olympius Ship Profile] ~ The Bullhead Battlecruiser Ship Database
[A patient of the H+ Clinic] ~ Body upgrade while a member of The Core|
[The Olympius Ghost Team] ~ Work in progress, but is the "Marines onboard the Olympius"
Introduction;
Rosalina Romanov was born on Planet Hamburg, Rheinland sector. She came from a poor but hard working family, and her father was killed at a young age. Her mother was a nurse on her home planet. Her father was a mercenary from Liberty who went to Rheinland and met Alana (Rosalina's) mother. Her father (Leon) became a Federal Police officer of Rheinland and was later shot down and killed by Nomads.
Not long after Rosalina went to university and studied forensic science where she later joined BDM and wanted to find and understand why her father was killed by these aliens. After a few years she was offered to become a pilot and a few years later joined The Core.
She joined The Core in hopeing they will be able to help her find out what she wanted to know but instead they used her as a weapon to kill innocent people on Freeport 11, shoot the Order and it was all due to greed and wanted to control the Omicrons. Rosalina later left the Core after working through the ranks and being promoted the same day she left. Her promotion was to rank Paladin but she was already in command of a warship known as The Olympius (Bullhead).
After leaving Core she started of by trying to amend things with organisations within the Omicron sector. Zoners, The Order mostly but not only them but groups that The Core and The Olympius have fired upon. From that moment she gets access to Freeport back in Omicron Theta to visit her mother. After visiting her mother she went back with the crew and the Olympius into Nomad Worlds and she came across a monstrosity the K'Hara Inanna Guardian. Who seeked revenge on the crew of the Olympius and Rosalina Romanov mostly. The Inanna Guardian wanted revenge for the fire she gave to the Guardian which later made it vanished and it came back bigger and stronger. Not only this but Olympius was heavily damaged and Rosalina Romanov was later captured.
Rosalina Romanov was born on Planet Hamburg, Rheinland sector. She came from a poor but hard working family, and her father was killed at a young age. Her mother was a nurse on her home planet. Her father was a mercenary from Liberty who went to Rheinland and met Alana (Rosalina's) mother. Her father (Leon) became a Federal Police officer of Rheinland and was later shot down and killed by Nomads.
Not long after Rosalina went to university and studied forensic science where she later joined BDM and wanted to find and understand why her father was killed by these aliens. After a few years she was offered to become a pilot and a few years later joined The Core.
She joined The Core in hopeing they will be able to help her find out what she wanted to know but instead they used her as a weapon to kill innocent people on Freeport 11, shoot the Order and it was all due to greed and wanted to control the Omicrons. Rosalina later left the Core after working through the ranks and being promoted the same day she left. Her promotion was to rank Paladin but she was already in command of a warship known as The Olympius (Bullhead).
After leaving Core she started of by trying to amend things with organisations within the Omicron sector. Zoners, The Order mostly but not only them but groups that The Core and The Olympius have fired upon. From that moment she gets access to Freeport back in Omicron Theta to visit her mother. After visiting her mother she went back with the crew and the Olympius into Nomad Worlds and she came across a monstrosity the K'Hara Inanna Guardian. Who seeked revenge on the crew of the Olympius and Rosalina Romanov mostly. The Inanna Guardian wanted revenge for the fire she gave to the Guardian which later made it vanished and it came back bigger and stronger. Not only this but Olympius was heavily damaged and Rosalina Romanov was later captured.
As time goes on I will keep adding, stories, threads and communication threads for this character here so it is easier to access, people can have a read through.
I am willing to accept both negative, and positive feedback, but mostly I would prefer constructive and helpful feedback. I have never gone to this state before trying to roleplay character. I have done a attempt before which I feel has failed compared to this one.
[Rosalina Romanov and her story] ~ The main roleplay thread which will tell Rosalina's story.
[Profile Database: Rosalina Romanov] ~ Rosalina Romanov Profile Database
[The Olympius Ship Profile] ~ The Bullhead Battlecruiser Ship Database
[A patient of the H+ Clinic] ~ Body upgrade while a member of The Core|
[The Olympius Ghost Team] ~ Work in progress, but is the "Marines onboard the Olympius"
[Onboard The Olympius] ~ This is a roleplay thread which is Invite Only
[Day's in Liberty] ~ This is roleplay thread which is Invite Only
[Day's in Liberty] ~ This is roleplay thread which is Invite Only
[To: Ingenuus Research Group] ~ Comms to IRG|
[To: The Order Overwatch] ~ Comms to Order|
[To: Junker Congress] ~ Comms to .:j:.
[To: Crayter Republic] - Comms to CR|
[To: Core Guildkeeper/Masters] ~ Comms to the Core| HC
[To: Rosalina Romanov] ~ Highly secure message from Cordelia Lyell with a proposal
[To: The Order Overwatch] ~ Comms to Order|
[To: Junker Congress] ~ Comms to .:j:.
[To: Crayter Republic] - Comms to CR|
[To: Core Guildkeeper/Masters] ~ Comms to the Core| HC
[To: Rosalina Romanov] ~ Highly secure message from Cordelia Lyell with a proposal
[Promotion #1] ~ Initiate promoted to Guardian and then Knight.
[Promotion #2] ~ Knight to Templar.
[Promotion #3] ~ Templar to Paladin.
[Promotion #2] ~ Knight to Templar.
[Promotion #3] ~ Templar to Paladin.
[Claim #1] ~ Two confirmed claims.
[Claim #2] ~ One confirmed claim.
[Claim #3] ~ One confirmed claim.
[Claim #4] ~ One confirmed claim.
[Claim #5] ~ Twelve confirmed claims.
[Claim #6] ~ One confirmed claim.
[Claim #2] ~ One confirmed claim.
[Claim #3] ~ One confirmed claim.
[Claim #4] ~ One confirmed claim.
[Claim #5] ~ Twelve confirmed claims.
[Claim #6] ~ One confirmed claim.
[DSAce.Logs] ~ Just a saved copy of the ingame interactions which will be used for forum RP (Personal Use ONLY)
[Wanted Logo and Transmission Bars] ~ Thread regarding a logo, symbol and trans bar that I am after.
[Wanted Logo and Transmission Bars] ~ Thread regarding a logo, symbol and trans bar that I am after.
Wesker is the 1 In Command of the Core| so I have gone to him via skype and requested permision to use the "Bullhead" Battlecruiser for my SRP which is in the future.
[8:44:50 PM] S H A G G Y: Hi Wesker, I know over recent months we've had our differences a hell of alot
[8:47:21 PM] S H A G G Y: I would firstly like to apologise for my actions I the Core| but Core was no longer for me from an OORP point of view and an inrp point of few.
"Rosalina was not comfortable in killing other humans, all she wanted was to research nomads." That is her reasons on leaving and taking the "Olympius Battlecruiser" with her. Why am I coming to you to try fix and amend things between us on an OORP level. Is because I wish to in the future SRP this ship as a personal ship. It will unlikely go to any faction but it will stay with Rosalina and her crew. I am sure you have seen my work I have put in over recent weeks and well this is my feedback thread -http://discoverygc.com/forums/showthread.php?tid=141840&pid=1806155#pid1806155- and well I would like to just get the necessary approval by 1IC| of Core| before I attempt anything else.
[8:51:22 PM] Wesker: Isn't roslina infected
[8:51:51 PM] S H A G G Y: No but yeah? I guess.
[8:51:58 PM | Edited 8:53:06 PM] S H A G G Y: Right now there is one person that knows and it is not me
[8:52:32 PM] S H A G G Y: It is a "Surprise SRP" you could say
[8:52:42 PM] S H A G G Y: I'm working closely with someone and they are leading the RP, not me
[8:53:38 PM] Wesker: Errr
[8:53:41 PM] Wesker: I mean
[8:53:56 PM] Wesker: I could care less Tbh since it's a bullhead
[8:54:11 PM] S H A G G Y: Okay, that is literally all I wanted to know.
[8:54:18 PM] Wesker: So w/e as long as u have good RP and aren't a shitter with it
[8:54:49 PM] S H A G G Y: Does it look like I'm doing bad RP and trying to shitter? I changed the ID put a Zoner ID on there and RPing with it.
[8:44:50 PM] S H A G G Y: Hi Wesker, I know over recent months we've had our differences a hell of alot
[8:47:21 PM] S H A G G Y: I would firstly like to apologise for my actions I the Core| but Core was no longer for me from an OORP point of view and an inrp point of few.
"Rosalina was not comfortable in killing other humans, all she wanted was to research nomads." That is her reasons on leaving and taking the "Olympius Battlecruiser" with her. Why am I coming to you to try fix and amend things between us on an OORP level. Is because I wish to in the future SRP this ship as a personal ship. It will unlikely go to any faction but it will stay with Rosalina and her crew. I am sure you have seen my work I have put in over recent weeks and well this is my feedback thread -http://discoverygc.com/forums/showthread.php?tid=141840&pid=1806155#pid1806155- and well I would like to just get the necessary approval by 1IC| of Core| before I attempt anything else.
[8:51:22 PM] Wesker: Isn't roslina infected
[8:51:51 PM] S H A G G Y: No but yeah? I guess.
[8:51:58 PM | Edited 8:53:06 PM] S H A G G Y: Right now there is one person that knows and it is not me
[8:52:32 PM] S H A G G Y: It is a "Surprise SRP" you could say
[8:52:42 PM] S H A G G Y: I'm working closely with someone and they are leading the RP, not me
[8:53:38 PM] Wesker: Errr
[8:53:41 PM] Wesker: I mean
[8:53:56 PM] Wesker: I could care less Tbh since it's a bullhead
[8:54:11 PM] S H A G G Y: Okay, that is literally all I wanted to know.
[8:54:18 PM] Wesker: So w/e as long as u have good RP and aren't a shitter with it
[8:54:49 PM] S H A G G Y: Does it look like I'm doing bad RP and trying to shitter? I changed the ID put a Zoner ID on there and RPing with it.
// Sanction reports are not necessary to this character, but it will effect my roleplay in the future.
[Violation of Server Rules #1] ~ Violated Rule 6.
[Violation of Server Rules #2] ~ Violated Rule (Server administrators will impose sanctions on players for violating server rules and for any actions that harm server gameplay.)
[Violation of Server Rules #3] ~ Violated Rule 2.1
[Violation of Server Rules #4] ~ Violated Rule 1.3
[Violation of Server Rules #5] ~ Violated Rule 3.2
[Violation of Server Rules #1] ~ Violated Rule 6.
[Violation of Server Rules #2] ~ Violated Rule (Server administrators will impose sanctions on players for violating server rules and for any actions that harm server gameplay.)
[Violation of Server Rules #3] ~ Violated Rule 2.1
[Violation of Server Rules #4] ~ Violated Rule 1.3
[Violation of Server Rules #5] ~ Violated Rule 3.2
To: The Order ~ Just informing them the ship is fully repaired and ready to assist them.
To: Independent Miners Guild ~ Making contact and informing them assistance is there in the Omicrons if it is needed.
To: Overlord Jared Nomak ~ Making first contact and requesting assistance to get intouch to Das Wilde.
To OSI ~ Making first contact and asking about old scrapped transporters.
To: Independent Miners Guild ~ Making contact and informing them assistance is there in the Omicrons if it is needed.
To: Overlord Jared Nomak ~ Making first contact and requesting assistance to get intouch to Das Wilde.
To OSI ~ Making first contact and asking about old scrapped transporters.
To: Commune | From: Jasper Saulder ~ Black.Lotus (Contractor who delivered goods)
]To: Unschuld | From: Jared Nomak ~ Requesting Rheinland Technology and Engines
]To: Unschuld | From: Jared Nomak ~ Requesting Rheinland Technology and Engines
Weapon Exchange - The original request for Order technology in exchange for the Rheinland technology which cannot be maintained.
Acceptance to Order| - ~ Approval and response from the Grand Admiral Golanski with acceptance to the primary fleet after proving there worth and loyalty to the Overwatch after being former Core.
Thanking Grand Admiral Golanski - ~ Thread to the Grand Admiral, thanking him for allowing the changes for the Olympius to happen and to start work on the vessels that where in the drydocks of the Olympius. This will be a later request after enough RP has been done.
Acceptance to Order| - ~ Approval and response from the Grand Admiral Golanski with acceptance to the primary fleet after proving there worth and loyalty to the Overwatch after being former Core.
Thanking Grand Admiral Golanski - ~ Thread to the Grand Admiral, thanking him for allowing the changes for the Olympius to happen and to start work on the vessels that where in the drydocks of the Olympius. This will be a later request after enough RP has been done.
To: Rosalina Romanov ~ Unioner's wanting to meet Rosalina
To: FL-ER - Unioner's contacting FL-ER requesting supplies
Project Acheron: A Union paper on the use of pulse weapons in antisubsystem roles. - Planning the way forward
To: Enclosed Parties. Subject: Operation Hammer Ascendent | From: E.Abendroth - Operation Hammer Ascendent
Asylum Request and processing Centre. ~ Requesting Asylum for Rosalina and family/friends.
Unioner's Message Report
To: James Riley, the Selket. ~ Unioner's getting hold of Sentinel James Riley
Avast the Airlocks!: Ship-to-ship boarding in the acquisition of warships. ~ How to breach the Selket
To: FL-ER - Unioner's contacting FL-ER requesting supplies
Project Acheron: A Union paper on the use of pulse weapons in antisubsystem roles. - Planning the way forward
To: Enclosed Parties. Subject: Operation Hammer Ascendent | From: E.Abendroth - Operation Hammer Ascendent
Asylum Request and processing Centre. ~ Requesting Asylum for Rosalina and family/friends.
Unioner's Message Report
To: James Riley, the Selket. ~ Unioner's getting hold of Sentinel James Riley
Avast the Airlocks!: Ship-to-ship boarding in the acquisition of warships. ~ How to breach the Selket
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