well, i have two stories currently on the forum, and i have many more to upload, i will be posting link's to them in here as time goes on.. i'd like to know what everyone think's.. Honestly any feedback i get will shape my future stories..
The current two stories i have, One of which isant finished yet are linked in my Signature. Any feedback as long as you are not damn-right rude is welcome. Many thanks
Its not bad, are you deliberatly leaving the who and what Subject Zero is vague?
The idea behind the story is fine - my only criticisms would be of the sentence structure and spelling... the sentences dont "flow"...
What I mean this this.
Sentences that stand alone in this manner.
These can be very good for some situations, however not always;
It could be just me, but I personally find that really hard to read and to get a sense of a story thats flowing nicely. Anyway, ill read some more later - Keep it up..!