Alright, so to those that don't know what is it about: http://discoverygc.com/forums/index.php?showtopic=99643
And to those who does, please tell me what you think of the story, is it good, bad, missed the point or simply hopeless.
All I have to say are 2 notes:
#1 it's supposed to be funny (not like ZOMG HELIRIOUS DIS GUY IS GENIOUS, just funny...)
#2 chapter .:Command Number 15AA-7DT: is abit like, not in the style of the rest of the story, I know. I wrote it as informative to other people to know what I will be talking about in the next chapter(s?)
Hehe... im not exactly sure what's going on - some parts of it are funny, others are a bit disconnected.
The main issue you have right now is your grammar, sentence structure and spelling are letting you down, the story needs to flow more and these things can get in the way of that happening.
' Wrote:Hehe... im not exactly sure what's going on - some parts of it are funny, others are a bit disconnected.
The main issue you have right now is your grammar, sentence structure and spelling are letting you down, the story needs to flow more and these things can get in the way of that happening.
Alright, I'll sit a bit and fix Grammar (I, myself, found few grammatical errors and fix'ed them. Happens when I write fast)
' Wrote:Alright, I'll sit a bit and fix Grammar (I, myself, found few grammatical errors and fix'ed them. Happens when I write fast)
Its ok! Im used to it, im a teacher... and taught English to non-english speakers for 4 years! I would encourage you to continue your stories. Are you considering in game events as well? One thing thats nice about forum RP is that it adds a lot of depth to your in game characters.
' Wrote:Its ok! Im used to it, im a teacher... and taught English to non-english speakers for 4 years! I would encourage you to continue your stories. Are you considering in game events as well? One thing thats nice about forum RP is that it adds a lot of depth to your in game characters.
I actually do, after I get my PC fix'ed since it's dead. As I am using my dad's and if I'll DL FL to it, I might not live long enough to play that character:D
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