Feedback on short story, please.

[Orin]

Breath of Nephthys

It's not very long, and more of an explanation story why my Freelancer flies a Nephthys; which is, not very common I'd imagine.

Rest assured, I don't fly the Nephthys for PvP purposes. One, because it's generator sucks. And two, Orin barely PvPs at all. Yes, I'm speaking in the third person. Oh, three, I've had this made up since before Disco existed (in my mind), so again: not an excuse.

Constructive criticism please, I wrote it at 1:00am, cut me some slack.

[stewcool]

I'd read it but my eyes dont like the color text. Sorry.

My eyes dont like alot of colored text when its small haha

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[Orin]

It's white now. The easiest of all colors to read.

:sleep: