An unlikely pirate - Feedback

[Himura Suzume]

Hi there.

I'd love some feedback on my little story.
http://discoverygc.com/forums/showthread.php?tid=93094

I've spent the day making it fugly.
(By that I mean I've put it in color code as is customary here on Discovery. I personally think it looks like something done by a preschooler but I'm not the one reading it... I guess)


Anyway. So far it's the background story to my character. Up until I actually started playing on her.

Now I'd love some feedback and whether or not you think I should continue writing the story.

It would both be pure fiction but also be based on in game actions, conversations and events.

Thank you.