Commissar's Feedback

[Swallow]

Hey Swallow,

Thank you for the feedback! I'm just really glad that someone beside me's reading the things, and I appreciate you taking the time to drop a note here. Both Requiem and Visiting Hours have new posts now, and I'm hoping to keep the former moving reasonably steadily.

I've been keeping an eye on Liliana's biography as well. The art you've got in there is brilliant - particularly How to maintain your Decurion. Just a suggestion as far as the writing goes, but you might want to do away with the * asterisks to show Liliana's actions. It's a handy convention in-game, but on the forums it's not really required, and tends to break up the flow of the post. Similarly, I've noticed tenses can jump around a bit, which can also disrupt the flow (for example, Liliana squints her eyes and tries to block bright sunlight with her hand. As her eyes are getting used to the light after being in dark room, she finally could look around. should probably be Liliana squinted her eyes and tried to block the bright sunlight with her hand. As her eyes are adjusted to the light, she could finally look around. (if you're going for past-tense). Either way, thank you. It's great to see the effort you're putting into your characters.

Thank you! So much! I will for sure try to make proper formatting and attempt to correct style as much as I can. And I am very thankful for your notices regarding my writing, I will consider it to improve my story.

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FL MOD(EL)MAKING: TOOLS, RESOURCES, TUTORIALS AND MY SHIPS (OLD)

I am on discord: Roal-Yr#5994, I don't log on forum more than a few times a year.

I am not making ships for FL anymore, I am making my own space game instead:
https://github.com/roalyr/GDTLancer
https://roal-yr.itch.io/gdtlancer
https://youtube.com/playlist?list=PL5HQB...cdH45LZgjj