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Name: Shade Hux
Common Aliases: 'Shadow'

Age: 20

Gender: Male

Appearance:
Complexion: None
Hair: Brown
Eyes: Brown
Height: 1.83m (6feet)
Weight: 65Kg (143.3lbs)

Occupation: Emoployee in White Shipping Company

Previous Employment: Bounty Hunter.

Education:
Accademy of Manhattan, New York (ages 4-11)
Battle School, New York(ages 11-16)
Bounty Hunter, Sirius System(ages 16-20)
City of New London, Sirius System - White Shipping Company (Current)

Known Relatives:
Mother: Larra Sanderson ; K.I.A. (774 AS - 816 AS, Age 42). A Senior Officer within the Liberty Police Inc., Larra played an important role in criminal fight. Following her promotion to Officer in 789 AS, she was reassigned and spent three years working with the Liberty Embassy on Planet New London, New London. She returned, and got pregnant with Nolan, in the beginning of 803 AS. At the beginning of 804 Shade came to life but he was taken by Liberty Navy Officers and brought to Accademy. In 809 AS, sad for unsuccessful dialog between Mollyes and Liberty she decided to get back to her officer life joining Liberty Police Inc. and gaining rank of Senior Officer of Cruiser Tranquility. Since then she continued to fight the useless battle against Liberty Criminals until 816 when her wing was assigned a special mission against Outcast forces. After few fight her wing was ambushed by Outcasts riders and took down without mercy. Shes body was never found same as all wreckage of her party and at the and of 816 she was proclaimed K.I.A.
Father: Nolan Johnson ; K.I.A. (769 AS - 815 AS, Age 46 ). Nolan Johnson Admiral of Battleship Hope Betronia Armed Force played an important role against Mollyes Riders Leeds. Assassinated in 815 AS by Mollyes. All info about his life were lockdown inside Academy on Leeds data still not public.

Personality

Shade very successful Bounty Hunter (100+ terminated contracts). Took off when he was 4 years old and he has never seen his parents again. After 4th year of his life he began his military education. He was a brilliant student ,he learned to know the enemy and use their weakness against them. At the age of 11 he was transferred to Battle School where he learn how to manage a huge size battle even if under numbered. His generation kids were chosen for an advanced training for a new defense against Order. It was hard a frustrating school full of failure but, after the age of 16 he decided to become a Bounty Hunter and he started to push himself trough the Sirius System. At the beginning he was average Bounty Hunter but after few years he became one of the deadliest Bounty Hunter in Sirius. Just by the case he met Leader of the White Shipping Company and decided to give up his dangerous job and do something more profitable and less dangerous.Currently he works in White Shipping Company.
History

New London Childhood: 804-808 AS - Ages 0-4
He never known what happened before his 4th year of life, Due his memory lost



Accademy of Manhattan: 808-815 AS - Ages 4-11


Introduced as the youngest member of Manhattan Accademy New York Shade had a grave handicap between all his mates,his memory was lost. He was very hard study student and he had a natural talent in mind games or space fight simulator even due his handicap. He was shy and speechless he didn't told a single word during his first year of stay but his marks were brilliant. So one day his jealous class mate Sebastian decided to challenge him into a SFS (space fight simulator)and in fact Shade prove his strength. Sebastian angry of his defeat he hit Shade and the combat begun. Shade was weak child but very intelligent and he managed to defeat Sebastian by using a platform on which they were playing the game. After this fight he gain a full respect of his class mates and continued his studies. In 815 he was transferred to a Battle School.


Battle School: 815-820 AS - Ages 11-16


After the transfer he begun his strategic and skill education to face off Order in open war. At the beginning he was too focused on preserving all friends he made inside the Accademy with huge fear of losing them but then he understood that they would stay on his flank no matter what happen. This has given him a huge motivation on learning all advanced combat techniques and help him to command and manage a huge squadron which was his near future. He learned a lot from there but he was feared by a war.After completing his education he left Manhatten and decided to became a Bounty Hunter due his fear of war.



Bounty Hunter: 820-824 AS - Ages 16-20


After he left the Manhatten he decided to move forward so he bought himself a ticket to Planet New London. While climbing on board he began to feel sadness about leaving his birth place and going somewhere other where he wouldn't know anyone. Fear was growing in his veins but he hadn't step back and he decided that leaving was the best thing to do. After he lended on Planet New London he understood that it was not so bad as he imagined. Very soon he found a job as flight instructor inside a Space Ship Piloting school. That job helped him earning enough to buy his frist Bounty Hunter ship (Sea Serpent) and all basic equipment he needed. His first contract was to take down a Molly pilot which had a bounty on his head. It was a quite a difficult task for someone who never faced a real enemy different from computer AI, but in the end he made it even if he lost one on his fighter guns. After that he continued to take more contract as a freak addict. And finally in 825 AS he met White Shipping Company leader while taking a contract. After that he decided that joining White Shipping Company was the best move for him now.



White Shipping Company: 825 AS - Present - Aged 20


He joined White Shipping Company and decided together with its leader to improve WSC and gain a high status inside a Sirius



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