I rarely comment on these in order to avoid any "an admin said" type inferences, these comments are as a player not an admin.
In general the few in-game encounters I have had have been fine but I do have some comments on this request, in places I find it a little vague when trying to ascertain what you mean.
Orex Industries is an industrial Zoner company that extracts valuable metals [Maybe elaborate the other metals, if the push is just iridium maybe just go for that hyper specific RP] from Omicron Space, mainly Iridium.
- - About us - -
Orex Industries was set up for the purpose of mining a useful and important metal [Maybe some RP as to why it is useful and important, use this to display some RP underpinning and help indicate in the readers mind that some depth has gone into developing the faction. It may also set up some future RP arcs if you wanted that development.]. in Omicron Delta - Iridium.
Collecting Iridium and other useful metals and minerals [first mention of minerals, after you have defined you are a metal extraction company] from Omicron Space involves "taking modern equipment and a very systematic approach at Orex Industries" [A little vague as to what this actually means, maybe elaborate on equipment, what make you special, what exactly is a systematic approich. Linked to business procedures? Linked to extraction procedures/ Linked to how you work a mining zone? invent (RP) something to give some flavour] . Our highly qualified engineers, scientists, and technicians remain committed to working harder to ensure that our extraction techniques remain economically viable, safer, and "environmentally friendly" [In what context, what does environmentally friendly mean in a mining field, I would hazard a guess that if you are exttracting mass from a system gravity will alter the whole system, so what exactly is this phrase getting at?]. We take into account the "two aspects of sustainability" [Which are?] and ensure that we meet all the laid down standards and "legal requirements" [Laid down by whom? Zoners may ne zoners as they are trying to live unregulated. Not impossibly to reconcile the two but a stated attempt would help] in our endeavors to minimize our negative impact on the environment.
This is why at Orex Industries, we have endeavored to give back to society in a number of ways [Not sure this is obvious as to how things are "given back" or which society is meant]. It reflects that the founders are highly concerned with humanitarian issues that govern the company’s principles. We support educational initiatives and worry about employment generation.
Hopefully this helps, it is intended to try and strengthen your headline OF creation request, not destroy it.