Not the feedback thread but really cool faction intro. Loved the use of Belter Creole and it makes sense in roleplay to have that linguistic mix for your faction. I don't play actively anymore but always nice to see new groups spring up to change the status quo.
If you guys are new - just have fun, be creative, and try to generally follow the rules of the server and the overall established faction mold (which you definitely seem to be). Things will settle over time as you find your ground and develop. There's always some ardent forum goers who seem to impose their own personal views on what and how RP ''should be''.