Hmm, any advice for my rp history?

[ghostcat]

My first real RP
The links in my sig. I thought that an 1st person RP is overdone, so i decided to make the whole story from various files.
I'm no-where near complete, but i want to know what everyone thinks before i do more.

i thought a subliminal command to defend any trader might be interesting, especially if supernova is around ^.^

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........Once more unto the breach, dear friends, once more;..........But when the blast of war blows in our ears,.....
........Or close the wall up with our English dead...........................Then imitate the action of the tiger;.................
........In peace there's nothing so becomes a man........................Stiffen the sinews, summon up the blood,.........
........As modest stillness and humility:........................................Disguise fair nature with hard-favour'd rage!....

Dasher

"Another popup faction. Great. What's wrong with my popup blocker?" - Denelo
"Oh come on, slow and steady doesn't win any races, fast and steady does."

Back, if I can get this thing working!