Hmm, any advice for my rp history?

[Nadir]

OOC of course:
The problem with Doom's apparent method of role playing (and I speak as someone with a known bias, as the (acting) faction leader of a lawful group) is that he is inventing fiction to justify carrying out PvP combat AFTER initiating the combat. Or at least he's documenting it after. That's actually banned by server rules. We will always give (it's in our faction rules) unfriendly (but not KOS) units a chance to exit Kusari space to avoid combat, not just because it is good RP for a law enforcement organisation such as the KNF but also because it's a policy that abides by the server regulations. It's always possible Doom writes his story before attacking but KNF forces and allies were caught unaware (yet won - a credit to the skill of those involved as our foe is no beginner). Surprise attacks for no apparent reason or explanation (or where the explanation means nothing to the people receiving it) are an annoyance.

However, credit goes to Doom for documenting his losses where they occur. Lesser people would have glossed over those setbacks.

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Somewhat off topic but also somewhat related: Sorry, Doom... You wouldn't have written Goth Poetry in the past? The worst kind of writing known to humanity? Ahem. Maybe there needs to be a fiction writing guide, of which the first rule should be AVOID cliches and hackneyed phrases. 'pitch black', 'cold as steel', 'suddenly' - a useful rule of writing is the word 'suddenly' should be avoided at all costs. Oh, 'at all costs' is a cliche too. Avoiding such phrases is a handy rule of writing everyone will benefit from so Doom shouldn't take it as a personal insult - I mean only as objective criticism with the intent of being constructive. Avoid cliches, pomposity, common grammatical errors, punctuation errors, spelling errors... tend towards writing succinctly rather than using purple prose - in that regard Byron was an expert while you and I aren't. Avoid sounding like a bad Anime cartoon. It's translated from Japanese. As a KNF member I should know how bad the translations are.

As a friend (and for the purposes of explaining the comment, a university tutor) said to me yesterday, in relation to fiction writing, "your first 10 tries are probably going to be crap but after that you'll get better. Perhaps I shouldn't tell that to the thesis students." Probably not.
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