It's a good attempt but not extraordinary. Thinks that could make it look better:
- Where's my Sabre?
- The font used for the name doesn't fit.
- Try adding more of that character (include the cross from her neck too and make it shiny, perhaps)
- The quote shouldn't be in a special area.
- Dunno why but I don't like that smoke around the head.
- Where's my Sabre?
I know I'm asking a lot but if I will be really satisfied I might just put more money on the table.