Opinions Wanted

[Drake]

Okay, I had a spontaneous idea for a character the other day. I just posted his background... This is my first real try at a really big story, and I'd like opinions, critiques, etc. I sat down and wrote it all at once, starting at about 1AM.

Link here: http://discoverygc.com/forums/index.php?showtopic=8739

Also, I'd like ideas for ship/tag/ID/etc. If you read my entire story (it's long, yes), then you'll see that it seems like his ship is a Liberty Cruiser. I wanted a cruiser or destroyer-class ship, and the Liberty seemed most feasible with his RP. But I've never flown anything bigger than a gunboat (not overly fond of them, but I'd like to give one a shot).

Tag and ID is slightly more difficult. I'm thinking he may have defected to the Lane Hackers, as they would understand and welcome his knowledge and technical ability. If so, I'll probably give him a Hacker ID as well. I'm thinking that he may not be particularly close or loyal to the Hackers, and eventually (if the Admins deem me worthy after seeing the character played for a decent while), I might wish to switch to a generic Terrorist ID.

Any thoughts, ideas, criticisms, flames, stonings?