' Wrote:naming of battleship "black forest" doesnt seems appropriate... it should be a german name... also do we have absolutely no story about the battleship. The nomad part of the story makes no sense at all... such a massive overkill would have crippled the new rheinland beyond repair...
Also, I doubt an emergency escape pod sports a cryosleep device unless the thing is a big, big target...
I'd personally suggest something along those line (see link below), which I submited to the RM members and they seemed to quite like it. But dont expect the command of a battleship anytime soon for sure.
Yes, Black Forrest is a nice region in Baden-Wuerttemberg. And on correct German, it's "Schwarzwald".
Some regions init are really dark. Lived inmidst of it for 10 years.
In a brilliant tactical movement, i charged backwards.
Alright, i think that is good, im done with it, read the rest:)
Im not going to buy a rhienland battleship with at least some people backing my RP up, when the RM's ask...
Well, Since noone is replying...
Very "hectic", giving the feeling that the author wants to get onto the next part as soon as possible, not lingering with "whys" and "hows", but, instead, doing "whats". Maybe a few more "whys" and "hows" would slow the pace down and give the reader pause for thought.