[FEEDBACK] Prysin's Characters

[Prysin]

and another part added incase someone didnt know.

First post edited to show current progress

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[Prysin]

Updated Eve's story.

any grammar misstakes i should correct. Please do tell.

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[Prysin]

So, lately, i have made QUITE alot of updates to Eves story, but with nearly no feedback (a little on skype)

Come on people, there gotta be something you wanna tell me. I know i have a few grammar misstakes here and there and im working on those. But content wise there gotta be something you want to know or have changed/elaborated a bit more.

Should i extend some chapters? Or do you think the current story has enough info?

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[NixOlympica]

I am absolutely blown out, I will try drop detailed info tomorrow to explain why (and once I finish all the chapters) but:

- You have the best writing and narrating style I've seen on Discovery forums till now
- Your story is rough but in a good meaning, one of the parts even gave me creeps from how essential and "on body" it was.
- You are definitely pushing limits with some of the content, I like that
- I hope there will be more

More tomorrow hopefully

Pilgrim

[DarthCloakedGuy]

Kinda short.

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HISPANIANS, FOR THE GREATER GLORY OF HER PEOPLE
A Plea to the Outcasts (PG)
CHARACTERS:
LR-I.Got.Nothin', LR-Empty.Pockets, and LR-Dead.End = "Lash" McDaggit of the Liberty Rogues.
SMUG~Eat.My.Exhaust = Jane Terraman and Bob McAdams, smugglers of the Liberty Rogues.
[H]Cj.Martino.Perez = Martino Perez, self-declared Counselor of the Hispanians.
AVATAR MADE BY SPIRIT! THE AWESOME.

[Prysin]

Eve's story is now avaliable through SKYPE ONLY.

Any feedback should still be posted here, cuz i dun check skype that often

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[Lennox]

The parts of Eve's story I have read are very nice. Very nice style you have there. Heard you are working on it to update some features.
The only thing I missed a bit were the dialogues between all the people in the story. But all in all it was nice to read. Wasn't able to go anywhere till I read the story completely.

Can't await the continuation. :)

[Prysin]

Sadly, i have closed the story.... Whatever you read was the end of it. Anything written after that will not be released... if i even bother to write anything anymore.

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