One little piece of feedback. Some LWB went to the Gaians, as Cruiser Greifswald in Omega-3 attests. You missed that part in your comm to the Hessians, when you were listing where the LWB went.
Very exciting development, to have LWB reactivated.
nitpicks:
Your background says that an army of 1,000 went to Hauptbahnhof. This is a planet with 5.2 billion, and you are using the term army. 1,000 is...a very small army. You could easily go up by an order of magnitude. Further down in that same paragraph, you've the typo 'Forty-one man', you want men.
Next you say Rosa Lichtenstein is a 'fourty year-old widowed in keeper' Keeper?
(01-17-2021, 11:44 PM)Altzek Wrote: One little piece of feedback. Some LWB went to the Gaians, as Cruiser Greifswald in Omega-3 attests. You missed that part in your comm to the Hessians, when you were listing where the LWB went.
Fixed that! Thank you
(01-18-2021, 03:07 AM)Unseelie Wrote: Very exciting development, to have LWB reactivated.
nitpicks:
Your background says that an army of 1,000 went to Hauptbahnhof. This is a planet with 5.2 billion, and you are using the term army. 1,000 is...a very small army. You could easily go up by an order of magnitude. Further down in that same paragraph, you've the typo 'Forty-one man', you want men.
Next you say Rosa Lichtenstein is a 'fourty year-old widowed in keeper' Keeper?
Thank you
We might change that number, I will talk with the Highcommand about that.
Fixed the "Forty-one man"