Well, you're one helluva combat pilot, a good friend and fellow Congressman, and if I say anything more they'll start talkin'....
*thumbs up* from me, mate.
' Wrote:Well, you're one helluva combat pilot, a good friend and fellow Congressman, and if I say anything more they'll start talkin'....
*thumbs up* from me, mate.
I've only ever encountered your Order, and I'm bias against the Order by natures, so I'll keep my mouth shut:(
Though on the subject of your story;
' Wrote:Corporal Hill looked away from the console and frowned at Stone. "We will be the end of you human." As he said this, Corporal Hill lunged at Stone. "You'll all be ended!"
In a few moments, the rogue soldier had pinned Stone to the floor and was attempting to strangle him. Between breathes, Stone spoke. "Bastard's....infected....take....him....out!"
This doesn't sound like something an infected human would say or do. Sorry.
It's too "Saturday Morning Cartoon Villain" if you know what I mean, it doesn't match the tactics or the motives of the Nomads.
Don't sweat on it too much though, a most story-Nomads are completely unlike the Nomads that are actually in the mod, because people have naturally bias views and/or know nothing of the Nomad Lore/Motivations etc.
Other than that, it's a well contructed and paced story.
I chucked at this too:
' Wrote:"Oh and congratulations, you're one of a kind."
Cause I imagine that Stone was more one-of-a-kind before the operation, considering the population of Sirius. XD
' Wrote:Heh, did you LISTEN to Tekagi, the infected BDM operatives, or Niemann? Infected humans are ALL about the saturday morning cartoon villains!
That's cause FL was basically one long Saturday Morning Cartoon.
They don't sound nearly as evil and obvious as that. And besides, the Nomad's tactics, motivation and execution has changed vastly since the Nomad War.
Think of the difference between a child and an adult, the Nomads were inexperienced and young at the time of the Nomad War, having been fresh out of waking up and having never encountered humans before, it's been two decades since then, and they're vastly different.
Point being, I take it that Hill lead the Nomads to them, then tried to kill people (maybe the Commanding officer of the ship?).
In such a situation, in which the infected know that they're going to die during sabotage, the result would have been different.
Hill would have relayed the location of the Retribution, then he'd have stepped away from his post long enough to disappear off to a critical part of the ship while no one was paying attention and blow important stuff up before anyone can figure out where he went.
This tactic is better thought out, more suited to the modern Nomads and Wild than the Nomad War-era Nomads.
' Wrote:I've only ever encountered your Order, and I'm bias against the Order by natures, so I'll keep my mouth shut:(
Though on the subject of your story;
This doesn't sound like something an infected human would say or do. Sorry.
It's too "Saturday Morning Cartoon Villain" if you know what I mean, it doesn't match the tactics or the motives of the Nomads.
Don't sweat on it too much though, a most story-Nomads are completely unlike the Nomads that are actually in the mod, because people have naturally bias views and/or know nothing of the Nomad Lore/Motivations etc.
Was that when I chased your voidrunner with my lolgeb? Ah the good ole days.
Yeah, my story writing skills were a bit budget back then, I feel I've improved a bit though and hope to be releasing a bit more.
You can put a tick beside "knows nothing of nomad lore/motivations." I would of done a bit more research, but I was keen to release a story to see what it would be like. Perhaps the story is twisted by Stone's vision of nomads:P
Recently you chosen the role of Freeport One administrator and came with a rather unique conception to implement it at the station. Now, two month later, you are going to "sell" the authority for 515'000'000.
I'm under the assumption that you just missed this post, so I will repeat my question again before the case itself had not become outdated. I'm sure that you hadn't ignored me, because you just don't want to answer such a question.
So what is the roleplay background for the deal and for leaving the station after two month of playing the role of administrator with 515'000'000 of cash for it?
Unfortunately, I hadn't seen much of Privus Zoners around - with the only exception of that story with The Outer Project and some random Bounty Hunters; though, I won't mind to get links to some forum-sided roleplay (if it exists) to catch up with the progress of events in Omega-3 inbefore Dakun.