So as some of you may have seen, I have written a small little background on what will hopefully become a major RP of mine. For those of you that haven't already read the background of the HMP-Weare please feel free to do so here:HMP Weare. Now I first apologize if its text heavy, as I am not particularly skilled with Photoshop or similar programs. Any way I hope you found it interesting and not too rambling.
This is now what I need from you is your feedback so I can improve myself in the art of future RP posts. So I do need this especially considering creative writing is not my forte. So let the feedback commence .
Thanks to the following people on their rather useful guides:Alvin Katz, aerelm
Change log for HMP Weare biography
03/04/12- Added more people to the ship's roster
03/04/12- Added information on ships prison cells
Now that's something.. I must admit I'm not an avid reader but that post certainly had my eyes glued to it for a good while.
Overall wish I could give you a good amount of constructive criticism, but in all honesty every question I came up with was answered about a line or two after I thought it up.
Only thing I could possible recommend would be a possible bit of detail on the inmates sleepingving accommodation? It's a minor thing but other than that, from what I could see it was pretty much spot on. By that I mean I could get a real feel for the environment and well visualise it.
As it stands though seem like an amazing RP opportunity and here hoping to see you around Bretonia in the near future!
First can I say thanks for the comments, it is good that the ship's biography has been well received by the community that has read it. I have also added a few names on both the engineering and the medical roster, thanks for the comment on that. Additionally taking on board Arctic95's comment I have added a brief section on the prison cells, which I may redo should it need to. Finally I will also add a change log on the top post. So that you can keep up to date on what has changed.