Jack Denton's research log feedback

[Zeppy]

Greetings all

These research logs are my very first attempt at an RP story so please forgive me if they make you cringe a bit. Anyway, any constructive criticism the community can give me?

Research into the Kansas sector
http://discoverygc.com/forums/index.php?sh...;hl

Research on the Privas cluster
http://discoverygc.com/forums/index.php?sh...;hl

I know neither of these is spectacularly original, xenoarcheology, Daam K'Vosh planetary engineering and all that. But these are both part of my "grand plan" and I think the end product will be worth the back story. I hope anyway.

Also, if anyone has run into me in-game feedback would be appreciated on that as well.

Jack Denton

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Reseach into the Kansas sector

Research into the Privas Planetary Cluster

Research into Alien "Trade Lanes"

A new ship, Jack Denton's time on Freeport 11

The JHC Drive

An Unscheduled Vacation of Sorts

The above are meant to be read in order, if you jump in at "A new ship" you are going to be lost.

RP feedback thread

[Zeppy]

My latest creation.

http://discoverygc.com/forums/index.php?sh...c=105218&hl

Please give me some feedback!

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Reseach into the Kansas sector

Research into the Privas Planetary Cluster

Research into Alien "Trade Lanes"

A new ship, Jack Denton's time on Freeport 11

The JHC Drive

An Unscheduled Vacation of Sorts

The above are meant to be read in order, if you jump in at "A new ship" you are going to be lost.

RP feedback thread

[Kiith]

I have to say that your forum RP is very good, interesting and logically.

I didn't meet you ingame yet, but from that what I've seen I would say thumbs up for you^^

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"What's the word for when it feels inside your heart that everything in the world is all right?"

[Zeppy]

Thanks, it means a lot to hear that it's not as terrible as I think. There must be something I can improve on though, any pointers?

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Reseach into the Kansas sector

Research into the Privas Planetary Cluster

Research into Alien "Trade Lanes"

A new ship, Jack Denton's time on Freeport 11

The JHC Drive

An Unscheduled Vacation of Sorts

The above are meant to be read in order, if you jump in at "A new ship" you are going to be lost.

RP feedback thread

[SA_Scavenger]

Reading your "Research" is entertaining as well as informative, to a point of course. Keep it up.

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[Zeppy]

Thanks! I'm glad you enjoyed it, don't worry I intend to keep making more.

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Reseach into the Kansas sector

Research into the Privas Planetary Cluster

Research into Alien "Trade Lanes"

A new ship, Jack Denton's time on Freeport 11

The JHC Drive

An Unscheduled Vacation of Sorts

The above are meant to be read in order, if you jump in at "A new ship" you are going to be lost.

RP feedback thread

[Zeppy]

Greetings all, this ones my first attempt at an actual story story. It's got talking and everything!

Link

Not done yet but il try and finish it tomorrow, this RP stuff is hard work:)fun though

Let me know what you think, constructive criticism is welcome especially now when it's not done, easier to make changes.

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Reseach into the Kansas sector

Research into the Privas Planetary Cluster

Research into Alien "Trade Lanes"

A new ship, Jack Denton's time on Freeport 11

The JHC Drive

An Unscheduled Vacation of Sorts

The above are meant to be read in order, if you jump in at "A new ship" you are going to be lost.

RP feedback thread

[Zeppy]

Updated "A new ship", so far I have written the entire thing on my Ipod touch and this is the first time iv seen it on a computer screen... its a bit depressing to see it so tiny.

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Reseach into the Kansas sector

Research into the Privas Planetary Cluster

Research into Alien "Trade Lanes"

A new ship, Jack Denton's time on Freeport 11

The JHC Drive

An Unscheduled Vacation of Sorts

The above are meant to be read in order, if you jump in at "A new ship" you are going to be lost.

RP feedback thread

[Zeppy]

Another couple of updates to "A new ship"

Any constructive criticism?

Link

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Reseach into the Kansas sector

Research into the Privas Planetary Cluster

Research into Alien "Trade Lanes"

A new ship, Jack Denton's time on Freeport 11

The JHC Drive

An Unscheduled Vacation of Sorts

The above are meant to be read in order, if you jump in at "A new ship" you are going to be lost.

RP feedback thread

[Zeppy]

Finished "A new ship", I will probably go edit it later but at the moment it's to late and I need sleep.

The usual drill, constructive criticism is welcome and activly encouraged! (makes me feel weird when no one tells me that something sucks)

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Reseach into the Kansas sector

Research into the Privas Planetary Cluster

Research into Alien "Trade Lanes"

A new ship, Jack Denton's time on Freeport 11

The JHC Drive

An Unscheduled Vacation of Sorts

The above are meant to be read in order, if you jump in at "A new ship" you are going to be lost.

RP feedback thread