These are purely about loopholes created by semantics or contradictions or spelling. -GMG I.D says players instead of ships
“ - Can engage in piracy against Samura and Kruger players within their Zone of Influence.”
Every other reference to a player character is as a ship. e.g. “- Can hunt any ships”, “...and destroy ships if they refuse...”
It should always be ships rather than players.
Otherwise you will create a semantics loophole where some non-rp combateer decides that he knows the freelancer in front of him is a kruger faction member, therefore a Kruger player and attacks him- legally.
-If Solar can't ally with unlawfuls – are they still gonna be able to exploit their brigands ties?
Same for IND .
I suggest changing to “cannot ally with unlawfuls except for...”
-Samura ID
“Cannot ally with any unlawfuls except for Hogosha or Farmer's Alliance.”
Hogosha are quasi-lawful, so no need for them to be mentioned in that line.
On other I.D's you do not state “may ally with quasilawfuls” because they are assumed to be lawful for those purposes (I assume).
CryerID
marihuana is spelt – marijuana
golden chrysanthemums
“The Golden Chrysanthemums are a revolutionary group who want equal rights for women in Kusari society. They promote Cardamine use in Kusari. They are allied with the Outcasts and the Blood Dragons.”
It was pretty much accepted that the DPK gave women the vote, and that right to vote – which is one of the reasons they were able to win the first kusari election.
So, it's not so much equal rights for women, that's more peaceful like today.
What they do want is a matriarch – there is a rumour they have about not resting until a woman leads the House.
Sometimes I think they mean in an Imperial way – as an Empress. I also think that they promise to legalise cardamine and fight for it – coz without it they die.
Instead of simply “promote” I would say they “are the sole conduit for cardamine into Kusari society.” or something. They are badder than the info makes – and the equal rights is inaccurate at least.
Hogosha ID
“Cannot ally with any lawfuls except for KNF, KSP, and Samura against other unlawfuls only.”
the “other unlawfuls” bit is precluded / made irrelevant by the
“Pilot carrying this quasilawful ID is a member of the Hogosha who:”
they aren't unlawful – so they can't ally against Other Unlawfuls. Remove the word “Other” and it's all good.
Red hessians ID
Bundshuh. - should be Bundschuh
order ID
“with the exception of Alaska, Sigma-19, Sigma-17 and Nomad systems.”
I guess you mean omicrons, not nomad system? “Nomad system” is not obvious since it doesn't use words from the map like everything else. Like – chester could be considered a nomad system, but not an omicron. And of course – all systems are nomad systems.
Coalition ID
“They are considered enemies by all five house,”
should be “houses” and there are seven – the sairs been pushing for house recognition for a long while – and from what I hear are able to deal with houses on their level (if their deal making rumours are true), So are like there.
The O.C always call themselves a house – they have shipyards and a military so why not.
I suggest making it seven or “five lawful houses”
OS&C ID
“Orbital Spa and Cruise is an independent corporation focussing on passenger transport and luxuary resorts for the rich and famous.”
Luxury is misspelled.
Every instance on every ID of “Refuse to cooperate or are belonging to a house or organisation”
should really be “...or belong to a house or organisation”. The former is a bit lost in translation via indian media-stereotype.
-No zoi for groups in post #2 after I.M.G
This contradicts z.o.i specifications on other faction I.D's who are also sirius wide. Like D.S.E, Ageira, Planetform.
Either leave zoi off sirius wide groups (if it's even needed) or put it on every ID, with specified systems.
Soz about that, there is more I would address but it is less subjective.
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