(03-30-2016, 07:52 PM)Jeremy Hunter Wrote: Yeah, uh, feedback about the story.
The Order hasn't been on Akabat for 45 years so there's no way Monsek could have been born on said planet - well moon - as in actuality the current Order wasn't even on Toledo for 45. More like 15 years on Toledo and like 10ish or less years on Akabat currently. Or like three. I have to check the actual time line again, but yeah.
Other than that looks good so far.
Ahm... yeah, thanks.
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