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[Dusty Lens]

There was no 'hopping' between places, they picked Rheinland and went for it.

To the contrary they were spread across Sirius by the time of the Nomad war. One of the reasons Orellian (sp) jumped "ship" was due to the infection spreading through the LSF and Liberty government, not to mention Kusari. How could you as the leader of the Kusari wild stand behind a statement claiming that they picked Rheinland and stuck with it?

Furthermore why would they bother sticking with Rheinland when they can stealth sneak across Sirius.

Ugh. All in all your whole re-write is not only brutally boring and w/r/ist but just flies in the face of everything we experience from you people on a daily basis.

You've taken the perfectly acceptable idea of an immature yet powerful race struggling to secure it's place in the universe and the legacy left it, a race which in its pettiness is able to seize upon our own strife and discord to turn it against us, and turned them into some stupid powerful "we've already won, you just don't know it because (sun) group of two dimensional "enlightened" creatures which can only look down on us and sigh. It reads like a wishful dream fantasy shadow cast by insecurity.

Might as well say the Nomads fly keyblades for all I would expect anyone to accept this nonsense.

The story the two of you wrote is grand. But your claims of fleshing out an otherwise flat Nomads rings hollow, they're simply two dimensional in a fashion which is not only self serving but utterly absurd in the face of actions taken. There's nothing wrong with being evil and petty. Not everyone in Disco needs to be "good" or "misunderstood". The Outcasts still function as slavers, you don't need to say they make them citizens. The Corsairs can rip hulls open and frikkin kill every living soul aboard just for the sport of it. The Nomads can be petty and vindictive, the kind of race that would murder just to gain a disguise wearing the face of a loved one so that it could murder again, just because they woke and found those that made them gone and what had been left them taken.