"The Shade" Feedback

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Story can be found here: http://discoverygc.com/forums/index.php?sh...IRV\-Shade

A bit of introduction. As far as it can be understood, the story is about "ghost ship". Someone will tell: "oh no... not another one". I have to forewarn you, there's nothing mystical about this. Everything will be kept in format of science-fiction and Freelancer universe.

The story is divided to three parts:

I part: Bunch of reports which introduces reader what is happening. All reports are represented in "nowadays".
II part: "Three days". It tells story of crew members since 804.06.16 A.S. When "IRV-Shade" was ordered to look for lost scout, to 804.06.19 A.S. when the vessel was spotted for the last time in fourteen years.
III part (questionable): "Aftermath". It will tell various of stories about contacting the "ghost ship". This part is still questionable.
IV part (questionable): "Conclusion". It won't be a story. This will put all dots on "i" and explain some details. This part is still questionable.

Perhaps, someone guessed what does "Something dark is coming..." in topic description means. It has (almost) nothing story-related. "Something Dark is Coming" created by Bear McCreary for Battlestar Galactica soundtrack somehow inspired me to this story.

If you got any questions or comments, please, don't keep them for yourself.

P.S.: Haters gonna hate. So, I'll explain it. All paranormal stuffs that will be shown in story could be explained as hallucinations.

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