[06.03.2016 23:01:07] IRG|Alaunus: Thorn: *walks up to the window, watching curiosuly*
[06.03.2016 23:01:59] Death: Airo was put out of action by a hostile vessel.
[06.03.2016 23:02:14] Immertum: ***-ours- 'greet' -yours-***
[06.03.2016 23:02:27] IRG|Alaunus: Thorn: *peers at it curiously, getting out a pad and sketching it* Good Day.
[06.03.2016 23:02:38] IRG|Alaunus: Thorn: Do you have a label by which you are known?
[06.03.2016 23:03:46] 2016-03-06 21:04:06 SMT Traffic control alert: Device has requested to dock
[06.03.2016 23:03:46] Immertum: ***-ours- (known as) -Immertum-***
[06.03.2016 23:04:12] IRG|Alaunus: Thorn: *pulls up a chair to the observation deck window* It is joyful to meet you, Immertum.
[06.03.2016 23:04:37] IRG|Alaunus: Thorn: *scratches her neck* Yours is still young, right?
[06.03.2016 23:05:22] Immertum: ***-ours- 'agrees'***
[06.03.2016 23:05:49] IRG|Alaunus: Thorn: Ah... when were you brought into being amongst the stars? *smiles slightly*
[06.03.2016 23:05:51] Immertum: ***-yours- ~purpose~ (curious)***
[06.03.2016 23:07:06] IRG|Alaunus: Thorn: The same as yours... to learn.
[06.03.2016 23:07:34] Immertum: ***-ours- 'senses' ~darkling~ (curious)***
[06.03.2016 23:07:51] A/)-Violette.Ash: *static*
[06.03.2016 23:07:52] 2016-03-06 21:08:12 SMT Traffic control alert: A/)-Violette.Ash has requested to dock
[06.03.2016 23:08:01] Immertum: *** 'what' ~darkling~ 'doing'***
[06.03.2016 23:08:08] 2016-03-06 21:08:28 SMT Traffic control alert: A/)-Violette.Ash has requested to dock
[06.03.2016 23:08:13] (SolarR[X]-Tome.Songs: *Emiko seemed busy writing something on an rather large parchment*
[06.03.2016 23:08:34] Immertum: ***-ours- 'lost' ~darkling~***
[06.03.2016 23:08:34] Death: ~LN~Alpha-3 was put out of action by ~LN~Alpha-2 (Gun).
[06.03.2016 23:08:49] IRG|Alaunus: Thorn: *grins slightly, touching the window with a finger* I am curious as well... why do you use the term "darkling"?
[06.03.2016 23:09:00] Death: ~LN~Alpha-2 suffered a self-inflicted catastrophic decompression.
[06.03.2016 23:09:04] Death: FerosXing was put out of action by a hostile vessel.
[06.03.2016 23:09:34] Immertum: ***-our kin- is 'made (of)' -Light-***
[06.03.2016 23:10:16] IRG|Alaunus: Thorn: Ah, so it is a binary perception! 'Yours' and 'not yours'?
[06.03.2016 23:10:28] Immertum: ***-yours- 'darkling'***
[06.03.2016 23:10:49] Immertum: ***-yours- 'oppose' ~The Light~***
[06.03.2016 23:11:19] IRG|Alaunus: Thorn: *rubs her temple* ah... if you say so my dear. Just, remember the grey, hmm? *smiles slightly*
[06.03.2016 23:11:24] Death: ~LN~Alpha-3 was put out of action by ~LN~Alpha-2 (Gun).
[06.03.2016 23:11:27] Death: Lily.Wood suffered a self-administered loadout error (Mine).
[06.03.2016 23:11:43] IRG|Alaunus: Thorn: What else of this world have you learnt thus far? *pushing the chair away and leaning against the wall near-
[06.03.2016 23:11:45] IRG|Alaunus: the window*
[06.03.2016 23:11:50] Death: ~LN~Alpha-2 suffered a self-inflicted catastrophic decompression.
[06.03.2016 23:13:10] A/)-Bird.Of.Passage: Oh well.
[06.03.2016 23:13:13] A/)-Bird.Of.Passage: Got some samples.
[06.03.2016 23:13:34] A/)-Bird.Of.Passage: *grumbling* Though you had to bloody shoot it, didn't you...
[06.03.2016 23:13:44] Lelantos-1: ?: Well I didn't know you wanted.
[06.03.2016 23:13:54] Immertum: ***-ours- 'senses' ~darklings~ 'again'***
[06.03.2016 23:13:59] A/)-Bird.Of.Passage: Hello there.
[06.03.2016 23:14:05] A/)-Bird.Of.Passage: I won't harm you.
[06.03.2016 23:14:08] A/)-Bird.Of.Passage: My weapons are offline.
[06.03.2016 23:14:09] IRG|Alaunus: Thorn: *holds up a hand to the newcomers* ... play nice *smiles*
[06.03.2016 23:14:23] 2016-03-06 21:14:43 SMT Traffic control alert: A/)-ACV-Renegat has requested to dock
[06.03.2016 23:14:25] 2016-03-06 21:14:45 SMT Traffic control alert: A/)-ACV-Renegat has requested to dock
[06.03.2016 23:14:28] Immertum: ***-What- 'are' -darklings- 'purpose' (curious)***
[06.03.2016 23:14:33] Lelantos-1: ?: My guns are cold. Besides, I already accidentally killed a Marduk anyways.
[06.03.2016 23:14:44] A/)-Bird.Of.Passage: Why would you say that -
[06.03.2016 23:14:44] IRG|Alaunus: Thorn: *frowns* /Accidently?/
[06.03.2016 23:14:45] A/)-Bird.Of.Passage: ...
[06.03.2016 23:14:53] Death: ~LN~Alpha-2 was put out of action by ~LN~Alpha-3 (Gun).
[06.03.2016 23:15:07] Lelantos-1: ?: I brought it out of hiding. In front of the Navy...
[06.03.2016 23:15:11] Death: ~LN~Alpha-3 suffered a self-inflicted catastrophic decompression.
[06.03.2016 23:15:16] Lelantos-1: ?: I honestly did not expect it to be there.
[06.03.2016 23:15:45] Immertum: ***-ours- 'wants' -knowledge- from ~yours~***
[06.03.2016 23:15:46] IRG|Alaunus: Thorn: *looks at the two* It is so young... it is learning to speak to us.
[06.03.2016 23:15:51] A/)-Bird.Of.Passage: You /want/?
[06.03.2016 23:15:56] A/)-Bird.Of.Passage: Sorry - you don't demand knowledge.
[06.03.2016 23:15:57] If you find your ship in Bastille please check the Sanction sub-forum on Discoverygc.com.
[06.03.2016 23:16:01] A/)-Bird.Of.Passage: You learn it - you experience it.
[06.03.2016 23:16:05] A/)-Bird.Of.Passage: Doesn't work like that - young one.
[06.03.2016 23:16:35] IRG|Alaunus: *kneels down next to the window, watching intently*
[06.03.2016 23:16:52] Immertum: ***-ours- 'see' -spitfire- (in) [Liberty]***
[06.03.2016 23:16:57] (SolarR[X]-Tome.Songs: *Sitting writing on her large paper, speaking without looking up from it, surrounded in her dark room* They can learn like that
[06.03.2016 23:17:03] (SolarR[X]-Tome.Songs: actually, I've seen it done before.
[06.03.2016 23:18:28] IRG|Alaunus: Thorn: *sighs* ... so it has seen our 'finest' then. *chuckles*
[06.03.2016 23:19:05] (SolarR[X]-Tome.Songs: Emiko: *She pauses with her brush int whatever she is doing, looking up slowly, her upper eyes
[06.03.2016 23:19:17] (SolarR[X]-Tome.Songs: glacing at the camera* Does this..young one have a name?
[06.03.2016 23:19:42] (SolarR[X]-Tome.Songs: Usually its given by us, still, I wonder if it does. *Going back to whatever she was doing*
[06.03.2016 23:19:54] Immertum: ** Thorn starts to see a ship, donned in liberty colors, chases an unknown entity, that escapes **
[06.03.2016 23:20:06] IRG|Alaunus: Thorn: It calls itself Immertum, Emiko. *rubs her forehead, closing her eyes*
[06.03.2016 23:20:41] IRG|Alaunus: Thorn: It was spitting fire at you?
[06.03.2016 23:20:45] Immertum: ** feels desperation and fear of death, some anger mixed in **
[06.03.2016 23:20:45] (SolarR[X]-Tome.Songs: *The girl pauess, the brush in her hand as she holds her palm to her cheek* Lamb...? What a curious name...
[06.03.2016 23:21:33] Death: Etienne.Savoie was put out of action by Eikorr (Gun).
[06.03.2016 23:22:09] IRG|Alaunus: Thorn: *sighs to relieve the emotions, she opens her eyes to look at it* I'm sorry for their spitfire.
[06.03.2016 23:22:20] IRG|Alaunus: Thorn: *scratching her head*
[06.03.2016 23:22:50] Immertum: ***-ours- 'escapes' (from) [Liberty]***
[06.03.2016 23:23:34] Immertum: ***-ours- 'desire' -your- ~experience~***
[06.03.2016 23:23:34] (SolarR[X]-Tome.Songs: Emiko: *She goes back to writing, putting the brush down, bringing her two index fingers to her teeth and bitting down, slowly-
[06.03.2016 23:23:53] (SolarR[X]-Tome.Songs: drawing blood, tapping each of her other fingers to her thumb to 'dye' it
[06.03.2016 23:23:58] Death: Optimal was put out of action by [RM]Ge.Gerhard.Wolf (Gun).
[06.03.2016 23:24:15] IRG|Alaunus: Thorn: *fetches a folder, opens it and regards it for a moment before speaking* This one's joy yours freedom.
[06.03.2016 23:24:58] IRG|Alaunus: Thorn: *coughs, glancing slightly at the other two* This ones experience,...will.... try to share? *sighs and closes -
[06.03.2016 23:25:00] IRG|Alaunus: the folder*
[06.03.2016 23:25:27] IRG|Alaunus: Thorn: *sighs* Dumb idea...
[06.03.2016 23:26:34] IRG|Alaunus: Thorn: What, ur... experience are you looking for my dear.
[06.03.2016 23:26:43] IRG|Alaunus: //*?
[06.03.2016 23:27:20] (SolarR[X]-Tome.Songs: Emiko: *After dying her fingers each, she puts her palms together and lets out a breath, a bit sore from her thumbs but-
[06.03.2016 23:27:34] (SolarR[X]-Tome.Songs: ignoring it entire.* If it wants to learn..l-let it?
[06.03.2016 23:27:45] Immertum: **Thorn starts to see a child, so young. With a desire of knowledge, looks at Thorn and says: "teach me what you know about wo-
[06.03.2016 23:28:05] Immertum: -rld, you life, how was is it" **
[06.03.2016 23:28:08] A/)-Bird.Of.Passage: *attempts to fall asleep*
[06.03.2016 23:28:10] Lelantos-1: ?: Whoops.
[06.03.2016 23:29:19] Death: Optimal was put out of action by [RM]Ge.Gerhard.Wolf (Gun).
[06.03.2016 23:29:23] IRG|Alaunus: Thorn: *chuckles, closing her eyes to witness the imagery* "That is, perhaps, too long a story. Take it in bit size pieces...
[06.03.2016 23:29:29] Immertum: ***-ours- 'desire' -spitfire- (of) ~darkling~ to 'kin'***
[06.03.2016 23:29:57] IRG|Alaunus: Thorn: *frowns* ... you... desire conflict?
[06.03.2016 23:30:19] (SolarR[X]-Tome.Songs: Emiko: A warmind...? *She pauses but then pushes her two hands to the parchment*
[06.03.2016 23:30:46] A/)-Bird.Of.Passage: *sleeping on their desk*
[06.03.2016 23:31:01] Death: LPI-Leavenworth was divided by zero.
[06.03.2016 23:31:10] IRG|Alaunus: Thorn: *looks at Bird* Go sleep then.
[06.03.2016 23:31:15] Immertum: ***-ours- 'desire' (why) ~darkling~ 'spitfire' ~darkling~ 'kin'
[06.03.2016 23:31:17] Immertum: ***
[06.03.2016 23:32:01] IRG|Alaunus: Thorn: Ah... urm *coughs* ours witness spitfire of yours to... *points to herself* kin. Fear.
[06.03.2016 23:32:33] (SolarR[X]-Tome.Songs: Emiko: I asked why we fight each other...*Keeping her bloodied hands on the paper*
[06.03.2016 23:32:38] (SolarR[X]-Tome.Songs: //it*
[06.03.2016 23:32:55] IRG|Alaunus: Thorn: oh. *rubs her temple* We fear our own kin.
[06.03.2016 23:33:07] (SolarR[LC]-Inevitable: Wolf: An Ingenuus vessel... a pleasant sight
[06.03.2016 23:33:37] IRG|Alaunus: Thorn: *bows her head* Likewise, Captain of the Inevitable *smiles slightly*
[06.03.2016 23:33:55] Immertum: ***-ours- 'desire' (why) ~darkling~ 'spitfire' -eachother-***
[06.03.2016 23:34:02] Death: Etienne.Savoie was put out of action by [RM]Ge.Gerhard.Wolf (Gun).
[06.03.2016 23:34:04] (SolarR[LC]-Inevitable: Wolf: How's dear old Finny boy?
[06.03.2016 23:34:12] A/)-Bird.Of.Passage: *groans, leaning up again*
[06.03.2016 23:34:43] IRG|Alaunus: Thorn: *chuckles* Well enough, as far as I know. | Your kind share an entity my dear... ours do not. We are -
[06.03.2016 23:34:55] IRG|Alaunus: each a single entity... this can culminate in conflict.
[06.03.2016 23:35:00] A/)-Bird.Of.Passage: We fight for evolution - to become stronger *tiredly* blah-blah... blah...
[06.03.2016 23:35:24] (SolarR[X]-Tome.Songs: *Emiko lowered her head by throwing her neck forward, letting it completely lower, keeping her hands on the paper without -
[06.03.2016 23:35:47] (SolarR[LC]-Inevitable: Wolf: Tell Finn there's a bottle of Whiskey with his name on it if he heads down this end of Sirius. The names Joe, he'll know-
[06.03.2016 23:35:47] IRG|Alaunus: Thorn: You would make a poor teacher Ra... Bird. *grins slightly*
[06.03.2016 23:35:48] (SolarR[X]-Tome.Songs: removing them still, the binder edges already died a redder tint, yet the paper seemed to take zero effect at all*
[06.03.2016 23:35:51] (SolarR[LC]-Inevitable: -who's calling
[06.03.2016 23:36:00] Lelantos-1: ?: Come on, Bird.
[06.03.2016 23:36:09] A/)-Bird.Of.Passage: Huh? Wha?
[06.03.2016 23:36:21] A/)-Bird.Of.Passage: Oh.
[06.03.2016 23:36:22] A/)-Bird.Of.Passage: Hang on.
[06.03.2016 23:36:25] Don't use F1 or disconnect when interacting with other players.
[06.03.2016 23:36:26] IRG|Alaunus: Thorn: *grins* Shall do Joe. I bet if he knew, he would shoot across Sirius like a comet.
[06.03.2016 23:36:47] 2016-03-06 21:37:07 SMT Traffic control alert: A/)-Bird.Of.Passage has requested to dock
[06.03.2016 23:36:55] (SolarR[LC]-Inevitable: Wolf: He never did turn down a good drink *he laughs a hearty chuckle*
[06.03.2016 23:37:17] (SolarR[X]-Tome.Songs: *Grinding her teeth slowly, keeping her hands on the paper, the edges slowly going crimson, yet the paper didn't*
[06.03.2016 23:37:25] (SolarR[X]-Tome.Songs: *Still regardless8
[06.03.2016 23:37:33] IRG|Alaunus: Thorn: I do not know him well enough to know, but... noted *grins*
[06.03.2016 23:37:41] 2016-03-06 21:38:01 SMT Traffic control alert: A/)-Bird.Of.Passage has requested to dock
[06.03.2016 23:38:27] Immertum: *** 'ours' -departs- (joy)***
[06.03.2016 23:38:32] Preparing to cloak...
[06.03.2016 23:38:43] IRG|Alaunus: Thorn: May the Stars keep you, Youngling. *waves*
[06.03.2016 23:38:56] A/)-Sapphire.Raven: I won't fall asleep again, promise.
[06.03.2016 23:39:02] Cloaking device on
[06.03.2016 23:39:11] IRG|Alaunus: Thorn: It is departing, do not worry yourself.
[06.03.2016 23:39:17] (SolarR[X]-Tome.Songs: Emiko: *Her lips were mouthing odd sets of words very quickly, keeping her hands on the paper without moving them-
Glad to see your first log. And it's nice, for a first one. Let's see:
*Try to find more ways for calling humans. 'Darklings', as well as any 'Dark-sth', gets stale quickly.
*It's common to omit certain words in nom speech, but make sure these words are not necessary or important. For instance, *** 'what' ~darkling~ 'doing'*** is pretty incomplete. You could have said *** 'what' is ~darkling~ 'doing' (?)***, which greatly improves understandability. The (?) is the most common way of formulating questions in nom speech, but you can make up your own.
*I really like these **descriptions**. They are very useful, you can convey a lot of non-verbal communication with that. Keep doing it.
PS: I re-read them, and realized they were visions. Still, they are quite good, I liked the descriptions. Originally I thought you were describing what your nomad was doing, what the others could see. I guess I skipped through it too fast.
So, in short: Good first log. Make your phrases more complete, and add more vocabulary.
I'm not going to ask for complex/uncommon conversation topics yet (unlike "What are you", "Why do humans attack each other", "I'm a young nomad, eager to learn", which appear in almost every log of a morph that has just begun its journey)
[19.04.2016 21:51:53] CR|-Bravo.One: The hell?
[19.04.2016 21:52:02] Immertum: ***~Ours~ 'Senses' -Darkling- (curious)***
[19.04.2016 21:52:18] CR|-Bravo.One: Not one of these Nomads again...
[19.04.2016 21:52:40] Immertum: ***~What~ is 'Your' -Purpose- (curious)***
[19.04.2016 21:52:49] Immertum: // Yours*
[19.04.2016 21:53:01] CR|-Bravo.One: I'm heading back towards my home system... and yours Nomad?
[19.04.2016 21:53:44] Immertum: ***~Ours~ 'Desires' -Knowledge- from [CR|-Bravo.One]***
[19.04.2016 21:54:15] CR|-Bravo.One: Hm...
[19.04.2016 21:54:27] CR|-Bravo.One: What do you want to know, Nomad?
[19.04.2016 21:55:55] Immertum: ***~Ours~ 'Remembers' ~Yours~ -Agression- (Sadness)***
[19.04.2016 21:56:33] Immertum: ***~Ours~ 'Desires' -Cause- of it***
[19.04.2016 21:57:42] CR|-Bravo.One: I don't like Nomads... you stupid yellys
[19.04.2016 21:57:54] CR|-Bravo.One: One time... all of you will die!
[19.04.2016 21:58:02] Immertum: ** The pilot in the cockpit of Bravo One starts to relive the past conflicts as he explains reasons of his to this young one**
[19.04.2016 21:59:07] Immertum: **Remembers Immertum and 2 other at the orbit of Pecos, the engagement goes like a flashback through his eyes**
[19.04.2016 21:59:29] Immertum: ** He feels failure of his for second time**
[19.04.2016 22:00:05] CR|-Bravo.One: You was lucky...
[19.04.2016 22:00:15] CR|-Bravo.One: It was a three versus one...
[19.04.2016 22:00:52] Immertum: ~Ours~ -Brings- ~Light~ 'through' [Void] as -Streams-
[19.04.2016 22:01:00] Immertum: ***
[19.04.2016 22:01:21] CR|-Bravo.One: Pff...
[19.04.2016 22:01:56] CR|-Bravo.One: I really wonder what you are doing in Baffin
[19.04.2016 22:02:02] CR|-Bravo.One: Go and stalk someone else...
[19.04.2016 22:03:29] Immertum: **The pilot sees a Bar, which is Ambrosia, he realises Holdan is there too. Holdan turns and asks, oddly, yet somehow believab-
[19.04.2016 22:03:32] Immertum: le
[19.04.2016 22:04:06] Immertum: "What is Crayter Republic? What are they doing? Their goals and why they hate Nomads so much?"
[19.04.2016 22:04:30] Immertum: "Who are they?"**
[19.04.2016 22:05:50] CR|-Bravo.One: Questions... over questions...
[19.04.2016 22:06:27] Immertum: ***~Ours~ 'Agrees' (warmth)***
[19.04.2016 22:08:13] CR|-Bravo.One: Well... the Crayter republic... we came from the Crayter Sector... were we found a paradise for us...
[19.04.2016 22:09:28] CR|-Bravo.One: We were just star explorers
[19.04.2016 22:09:59] Immertum: *While being curious, waits for the pilot to finish first*
[19.04.2016 22:10:35] CR|-Bravo.One: What are we doing... well... we are fighting against the gauls and the Outcasts...
[19.04.2016 22:11:20] Immertum: ***~Ours~ 'Senses' -Other- ~Darkling~ (Curious)***
[19.04.2016 22:11:44] CR|-Bravo.One: Maybe you know this motto: For those we left behind...
[19.04.2016 22:12:09] CR|-Bravo.One: And why we are hating Nomads so much... well that's pretty easy... Nomads are trying to destroy the humans...
[19.04.2016 22:12:22] CR|-Bravo.One: And you know, my plan is not to die so fast.
[19.04.2016 22:13:04] Immertum: ~Ours~ 'Wishes' -no- ~Harm~ at ~Yours~***
[19.04.2016 22:13:16] CR|-Bravo.One: *he starts to laugh*
[19.04.2016 22:13:27] CR|-Bravo.One: Are you kidding me...
[19.04.2016 22:14:07] Forest.Nymph: "Hello there."
[19.04.2016 22:14:13] Immertum: **Pilot sees a Mover this time, a drunk one, says "Am i kiddin you lad? Hell no!**
[19.04.2016 22:14:17] CR|-Bravo.One: Sure... and this is why you destroyed Freeport 7...
[19.04.2016 22:15:12] Immertum: ~Ours~ do not 'knows' [Freeport 7]
[19.04.2016 22:16:03] CR|-Bravo.One: Well... one of your god damn Nomad "Battlegroup" destroyed one of our Freeports...
[19.04.2016 22:16:51] MeinerGnaden: Begbie: Howdy
[19.04.2016 22:16:52] Immertum: ***~Ours~ was not -one- with [Void]***
[19.04.2016 22:17:07] CR|-Bravo.One: Honestly Nomad... I don't care...
[19.04.2016 22:17:15] Immertum: ***~Ours~ 'Greets' (warmth)***
[19.04.2016 22:17:50] CR|-Bravo.One: Nomad equal Nomad...
[19.04.2016 22:18:00] CR|-Bravo.One: Anyway... I wasted to much time with you...
[19.04.2016 22:18:26] CR|-Bravo.One: You are alone...and now, I will just kill you
[19.04.2016 22:18:38] CR|-Bravo.One: Weapons hot!
[19.04.2016 22:18:41] Immertum: **Pilot sees his failure again, filled with desperation**
[19.04.2016 22:18:46] Immertum: ~Yours~ -Shall- be 'Exterminated' (Anger)
[19.04.2016 22:18:54] Immertum: ***~Darkling~ -Becomes- one 'with [Void]***
[19.04.2016 22:18:58] Death: Immertum was put out of action by CR|-Bravo.One (Gun).
Any questions or concerns about Bowex), just send me a private message.
Sorry for taking so long to reply. There are some minor details that should be corrected in this log. If you post more logs, I'll have more to work with.
In the meanwhile:
-There's no need to correct a mistake like using "your" instead of "yours". There's no right way in nomad speech. Also, inside |K'Hara, using OOC messages is frowned upon.
-Unless you're surrounded by many people, try not to address them by their character name. Instead of "[CR|-Bravo.One]", you could have said "Son of Crayter".
-This is a very personal comment, so take it with a pinch of salt: I don't like the word "Void". It's becoming overused, just like Dark-things long time ago.
There's not much else that can be said for now. Again, post more logs so I know what we're dealing with, and I can give you proper guidelines.