::*~My first experience with a machine with Artificial Intelligence!! *~* Curious. ~*::
[10.04.2016 14:40:54] Vor'Tice: ::... AI ~~~ Why are you here in Delta? ***::
[10.04.2016 14:42:23] Artificial.being: *Being unable to detect the way aliens interact using mental means, it leaves no response*
[10.04.2016 14:41:34] Artificial.being: *Machine detects EM vawes emitted by alien's reactor. But nothing more than that*
[10.04.2016 14:51:41] Vor'Tice: // "" be metal not have mind, ~~ or feelinf ... Null existence. *** Purpose cold. ... Unnatural ""
The overal looks seem good to me, (keep in mind that i am not K'hara, just someone who did a lot of nomRP back in the day), but you could change a bit here and there. Ill just give you a few examples as im terrible at explaining
Quote:[10.04.2016 14:40:54] Vor'Tice: ::... AI ~~~ Why are you here in Delta? ***::
The :: generally indicates you are talking as a robot, opposed to the cryptical mind-tingling you get from Nomads. Stick to using *, ** or *** as openers and closers of your sentences, otherwise some people might get confused.
Quote:[08.04.2016 13:24:56] Vor'Tice: *** Hi***
Generally when meeting another nomad, they say something along the lines of ** (warmth) **
Quote:[10.04.2016 14:51:41] Vor'Tice: // "" be metal not have mind, ~~ or feelinf ... Null existence. *** Purpose cold. ... Unnatural ""
This does not look like intentional OORP, but the // usually indicates you are talking out of character. Avoid using that as nomspeak
This Galaxy is vast; its wonders and beauty are almost unfathomable. But the galaxy also hides dark secrets, some of which have lain dormant since the beginning of time itself. There is a danger in secrets, both in seeking and in knowing. Some things are meant to be hidden from view. Some mysteries defy understanding, and sometimes even the things we think we know are untrue. Some secrets should remain untouched.
(04-11-2016, 02:47 PM)Caelumaresh Wrote: The overal looks seem good to me, (keep in mind that i am not K'hara, just someone who did a lot of nomRP back in the day), but you could change a bit here and there. Ill just give you a few examples as im terrible at explaining
Quote:[10.04.2016 14:40:54] Vor'Tice: ::... AI ~~~ Why are you here in Delta? ***::
The :: generally indicates you are talking as a robot, opposed to the cryptical mind-tingling you get from Nomads. Stick to using *, ** or *** as openers and closers of your sentences, otherwise some people might get confused.
Quote:[08.04.2016 13:24:56] Vor'Tice: *** Hi***
Generally when meeting another nomad, they say something along the lines of ** (warmth) **
Quote:[10.04.2016 14:51:41] Vor'Tice: // "" be metal not have mind, ~~ or feelinf ... Null existence. *** Purpose cold. ... Unnatural ""
This does not look like intentional OORP, but the // usually indicates you are talking out of character. Avoid using that as nomspeak
I thank the guidelines. Certainly I try to stick to more wisely.
[12.04.2016 18:57:01] Vor'Tice: **"sense ~'presence ... on - Darkling - (Warmth)"**
[12.04.2016 18:57:31] Order|Valkyrie: Would you look at that
[12.04.2016 18:57:50] Order|Valkyrie: Another alien kill to my collection?
[12.04.2016 18:58:00] Order|Valkyrie: Speak demon while you still have chance.
[12.04.2016 18:58:16] Order|Valkyrie: Allright
[12.04.2016 18:59:46] Death: Vor'Tice was put out of action by Order|Valkyrie (Gun).
***::The child's strength is its sincerity and confidence, ... 'but before the evil found', ~to the innocence becomes malicious and worthy of suspicion~::***
[14.04.2016 09:08:37] Oracle|Laguna: ?: Hmh...
[14.04.2016 09:08:49] Oracle|Laguna: ?: A young one...
[14.04.2016 09:09:32] Oracle|Laguna: ?: Why are you running from me?...
[14.04.2016 09:09:42] Oracle|Laguna: ?: I mean no harm for you...
[14.04.2016 09:09:47] Oracle|Laguna: ?: Gah... Children...
[14.04.2016 09:12:51] 2016-04-14 12:14:05 SMT Traffic control alert: ~~Zoner~~ has requested to dock
[14.04.2016 09:16:40] >Z|U<Solaris: Andrew: hello there
[14.04.2016 09:17:05] Vor'Tice: ^** hello ~~~***
[14.04.2016 09:19:38] Vor'Tice: // **Distracted .... en .... route" ~'Going home""" 'Iota! (Warmth)***
Dont use // as a sentence opener, even for nomspeak, it indicates you are talking OORPly.
As for the text. use less dots, and replace common words for more cryptical sentences, like, when you are going to Iota, you say something like (at least, this is what i would say): ** ~Ours~ seeks to -rejoin- the ~Chorus~ (warmth) **
This Galaxy is vast; its wonders and beauty are almost unfathomable. But the galaxy also hides dark secrets, some of which have lain dormant since the beginning of time itself. There is a danger in secrets, both in seeking and in knowing. Some things are meant to be hidden from view. Some mysteries defy understanding, and sometimes even the things we think we know are untrue. Some secrets should remain untouched.
Dont use // as a sentence opener, even for nomspeak, it indicates you are talking OORPly.
As for the text. use less dots, and replace common words for more cryptical sentences, like, when you are going to Iota, you say something like (at least, this is what i would say): ** ~Ours~ seeks to -rejoin- the ~Chorus~ (warmth) **